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Mind's Zen

Author: Timmy S. Edgar
ASL Info:    38 male Melb, Australia
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Words: 123
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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This Poem is about a place i used to go to near a swimming hole in my home town of Cairns this place is a little known waterfall which only really the locals know about as you have to walk into it throught the rainforest for about an hour, when you get there it is a sheer waterfall which falls into a pool about 3 mtrs wide by about 6 mtrs long the climb to the top is very difficult yet when you make it to the top there is a rock which sits right at the edge of the falls and it splits the water in two as you look down all you can see is a tube of leafy green trees extremely beautiful and peaceful and this is the inspiration for this peice i hope you enjoy it.

Mind's Zen

When my time is spent, within the rainforest
My minds in Zen, a special place where I can find
Meditation from within, I place my mind in nature’s florist
See the beauty, if you’ve been there you’ll feel at ease and unwind

Welcome to my peaceful life
My love, my peace and harmony
You’re calm and relaxed, with no strife
It’s my clarity, as the answers do come to me

See it’s my thinking place, a place that I call thought rock
If my city life become’s all jumbled up, with a need to reallocate
It is this place, that give’s me direction and my mind’s unblocked
Come with me and you will too see mind’s Zen start to instigate

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  Hello again Mr Timmy S Edgar... thank you for your comments... indeed thank you. Love this poem it contains a steady flow of serenity..... APPLAUSE !!!
| Posted on 2008-11-17 00:00:00 | by col13x | [ Reply to This ]
  This is very peaceful and lovely. This is well-written.
| Posted on 2004-03-09 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
  Sounds like a nice place Tim. Good write, very thoughtful and serene.
| Posted on 2004-03-09 00:00:00 | by DevilDinosaur | [ Reply to This ]
  this beautiful with fantastic imagery, nice flow and it is very well written.
| Posted on 2004-03-09 00:00:00 | by brokenmuse | [ Reply to This ]

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