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    dots Submission Name: Neglected Lovedots
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    Author: poetryman
    ASL Info:    47, male...phila
    Elite Ratio:    3.39 - 447/468/72
    Words: 172
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsNeglected Lovedots
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    Neglected Love

    you loved me
    with your heart and soul
    I pushed you away
    to stay in control

    you were always there
    no matter the situation
    giving advice and support
    with so much dedication

    but I was hard headed
    needing no one
    doing it alone
    my idea of fun

    you never pressed
    just stood by my side
    with your far away dreams
    of being my bride

    now alone I sit
    thinking of you
    remorseful, of all the things
    I put you through

    I was a fool
    to treat you so bad
    for you were the greatest woman
    I never had.............

    May you rest in peace and forgive me for not accepting your love...Bob
    Alot of times the best thing for us is right in front of our eyes, but we fail
    to grasp it, sad because you never know what the future holds...
    Bob Shank Oct-2004









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    ||| Comments |||
      It is true, we never know what we have until its gone. and then we are left with could of's would of's should of's. I'm sorry for your loss, and for the lesson that had to be learned. Beautiful write of admission.
    | Posted on 2004-10-25 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked the rhyme and flow and sometimes we always think the grass is greener or we have so many walls put up we have trouble lettng others in.
    Love, Peace, Joy!!!
    | Posted on 2004-10-25 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      i love it...ive done this before and have regretted it everyday since although im much too young for the marriage part but it has still made my life a living hell
    | Posted on 2004-10-25 00:00:00 | by alma-perdida | [ Reply to This ]
      wow...such sadness and loss...So painfully tragic...such an AWESOME piece...Just when you realized that you wanted what she had to offer...too late...*sighs* really good write:)

    ->Dark
    | Posted on 2004-10-25 00:00:00 | by drk_angl_17 | [ Reply to This ]


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