Description: The basic mental process after you hear what you dread the most...Not from personal experience, but it describes things a lot of my close friends have said.
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Wounded, wounded
Deep
Right through the heart
My life has collapsed
It’s been ripped apart
A scar’s left
Much too deep to heal
The pain is quite numbing
I can hardly feel
This battle wound
Infected and deep
A dream and a promise
I’ve forgotten to keep
I’m wounded, I’m wounded
Deep
Right through the heart
My tears do not heal
I am falling apart
An escalating tradegy, the blade takes no prisoners..looks like the worse is at hand, but there is always a bright smile hiding behind the cluster of bad winds and angry words..yep..lol...great work, thanks for the review.
Hmm, I'm really undecided about this poem. I do like it but it feels like it's missing something, the raw emotion maybe? I think it starts off really well but it finishes suddenly. A good poem but could definately be improved.
I think you did a good job of discribing it if you haven't actually been through it yourself... Your words are very expressive and to the point. I think it could have been a little more, organised but I followed it ok anyway and besides that I like it!
I like the images you have left here great writing not everybody likes rhyme schemes i have read other comments nice write my expierence with feelings you can really open ones minds set with a larger images sandman
Submission Name: deep
