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    dots Submission Name: Tabernacle Of Sorrowsdots
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    Author: BCute
    ASL Info:    23/F/MO
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 1295/1416/362
    Words: 322
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       Don't know where this came from. A poetic story of a love that cannot survive fate. *Shrugs* Tell me what you think.


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    The tabernacle of sorrows stands,
    contrasted against the clear autumn day,
    he doesn't know what to do or say,
    to make his love's pain go away.
    Seems like the harder he tries,
    she only sinks into more memories of lies.
    He can't stand the pain in her eyes,
    everytime she turns to him and starts to cry.

    He wants to be her knight in shining armor,
    riding his steed,
    to perform the deed,
    of relinquishing evil from her castle doors.
    Can't believe how much love she's received,
    to only be slightly freed,
    of Love's devious misdeed.

    As she sobs silently gazing back at her love,
    she feels her heart fall like a soiled dove.
    Doesn't seem fair he spends all his time,
    giving his shoulder for her to cry,
    in this tabernacle of sorrows in which she abides.
    Wishes to forget all the memories that plague.
    Slowly dripping the pain through her veins.

    Wants to open her heart to the love he so freely gives,
    he's so quick to forgive.
    She can't believe her luck in finding him,
    yet he doesn't deserve to have to live on a whim.
    She slowly steels herself for the blow,
    she has to deliver to her love,
    her fellow.
    Telling him he has to leave,
    telling him his love she doesn't need.

    She ignores the tears and confused look in his eyes,
    and runs into the tabernacle of sorrows before he sees her cry.
    He slowly turns and walks away,
    glancing back only once to pray.
    That his love,
    his angel,
    will one day be set free,
    if not by him,
    then let it be.

    She sinks to the floor inside her disasterous haven,
    and watches him slowly walk away,
    praying that her love,
    her angel,
    will one day find love,
    if not by her,
    then let it be,
    in this tabernacle of sorrows love cannot be free.




    Submitted on 2004-10-26 00:43:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      in this the tabernacle has to represent a tormented heart, of one who is either afraid to love or afraid to be loved, either way this is awesome and why should that surprise me, I've yet to read a bad one from you, very nice and keep up the good work...Bob:)
    | Posted on 2004-10-26 00:00:00 | by poetryman | [ Reply to This ]
      wow... this is so amazingly well done... like... the tabernacle speaks to me of religion and kinda like shes made a god out of her pain and out of past promises that were broken... theres shrines to all the pain and hurts or her past and she cant keep out of the tabernacle long enough to see that her angel boy really does love her... and the thing about tabernacles (especially the one the israelites had in the old testament of the bible) is that when every they moved they took the tabernacle with them... so really the tabernacle for this girl is always with her and completely inescapable unless she is willing to burn it down but yeah... this was a very good write!
    | Posted on 2004-10-26 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a very emotional, descriptive poem. i was expecting something more of romeo and juilet, but it turned out that the girl was the reason. she was blind to his love, drowning in her own self pitty. tabernacle is representing the shrine, religion she is constantly burrowing herself in. it's sad that she couldn't see that light of love from her angle boy. anyways, this was a good write, i'll enjoy reading more of your stuff.
    ~nameless child
    | Posted on 2004-10-26 00:00:00 | by nameless child | [ Reply to This ]
      This really describes love and sadness. I like the comparisons to be a knight in shining armor. I feel that she was at fault, maybe unconciously and didn't realize that he wanted to be there for her. But on the other hand, she wants him...maybe cause I am a guy I just don't know how a girl's mind works. One ? is the tabernacle of sorrows her heart? I just thought you termed certain elements of love and sadness interestingly. The first two lines were really great and again interesting paradoxes to your writing.
    | Posted on 2004-10-26 00:00:00 | by AFireInside01 | [ Reply to This ]
      hey umm... this was sad like an epuic tale brought a tragic ending where the audience fights back thier tears but can not help but empathize with the hero in shining armor but it has to be. closure. now its ok because thats just the way it had top be because it wasnt as seems meant to be. i can sure definitely positutly relate to this one babe. very nice work on my fav list! lata stp
    | Posted on 2004-10-26 00:00:00 | by kjb | [ Reply to This ]


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