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Kitty Kitty please, come to me And sit here quietly, on my knee As you start to purr, I pat you softly You’re my best friend, and you love me Thank you Thank you, for just being you When you look at me, I know it’s true Cause you pick me up, from when I am blue See it feels so nice, it’s our love and it grew Tell me Tell me please, Kitty, so that I know Cause when I’m with you, time seems to slow Walk here beside me, and through life we’ll go Just to think of your love, and my heart’ll glow |
aaw i love your poems on animals, i love them, i think i could open up my house as a zoo with the amount of pets i have lol kyrenia | Posted on 2006-04-30 00:00:00 | by secret kisses | [ Reply to This ] | the voice here is fairly child like, due to the repition. I would change the format of the first line of the last stanza so that It is "Tell me, tell me, Kitty, please," the stresses work better. I realize it's the same format as the first line, but thats okay too. Line 3 stanza 2 consider.."pick me up when i'm feeling blue" the last line there kinda hangs..wanting more to come.. last line consider "Just to think of your love makes my heart glow." Would actually make a good childrens poem, whith these mods. | jan | Posted on 2004-03-09 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ] | |