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    dots Submission Name: Kitty Kittydots
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    Author: Timmy S. Edgar
    ASL Info:    38 male Melb, Australia
    Elite Ratio:    2.6 - 263/200/71
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 985
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    Description:
       another poem about cats i just love em


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    dotsKitty Kittydots
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    Kitty Kitty please, come to me
    And sit here quietly, on my knee
    As you start to purr, I pat you softly
    Youíre my best friend, and you love me

    Thank you Thank you, for just being you
    When you look at me, I know itís true
    Cause you pick me up, from when I am blue
    See it feels so nice, itís our love and it grew

    Tell me Tell me please, Kitty, so that I know
    Cause when Iím with you, time seems to slow
    Walk here beside me, and through life weíll go
    Just to think of your love, and my heartíll glow




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      aaw i love your poems on animals, i love them, i think i could open up my house as a zoo with the amount of pets i have lol
    kyrenia
    | Posted on 2006-04-30 00:00:00 | by secret kisses | [ Reply to This ]
      the voice here is fairly child like, due to the repition. I would change the format of the first line of the last stanza so that It is "Tell me, tell me, Kitty, please," the stresses work better. I realize it's the same format as the first line, but thats okay too. Line 3 stanza 2 consider.."pick me up when i'm feeling blue" the last line there kinda hangs..wanting more to come.. last line consider "Just to think of your love makes my heart glow." Would actually make a good childrens poem, whith these mods.
    jan
    | Posted on 2004-03-09 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]


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