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Kitty Kitty


Author: Timmy S. Edgar
ASL Info:    38 male Melb, Australia
Elite Ratio:    2.6 - 263 /200 /71
Words: 109
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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another poem about cats i just love em


Kitty Kitty



Kitty Kitty please, come to me
And sit here quietly, on my knee
As you start to purr, I pat you softly
You’re my best friend, and you love me

Thank you Thank you, for just being you
When you look at me, I know it’s true
Cause you pick me up, from when I am blue
See it feels so nice, it’s our love and it grew

Tell me Tell me please, Kitty, so that I know
Cause when I’m with you, time seems to slow
Walk here beside me, and through life we’ll go
Just to think of your love, and my heart’ll glow




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  aaw i love your poems on animals, i love them, i think i could open up my house as a zoo with the amount of pets i have lol
kyrenia
| Posted on 2006-04-30 00:00:00 | by secret kisses | [ Reply to This ]
  the voice here is fairly child like, due to the repition. I would change the format of the first line of the last stanza so that It is "Tell me, tell me, Kitty, please," the stresses work better. I realize it's the same format as the first line, but thats okay too. Line 3 stanza 2 consider.."pick me up when i'm feeling blue" the last line there kinda hangs..wanting more to come.. last line consider "Just to think of your love makes my heart glow." Would actually make a good childrens poem, whith these mods.
jan
| Posted on 2004-03-09 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]


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