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    dots Submission Name: Reveriedots

    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 29
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    When I'm so starved for closed-eye dreams
    that I cannot stop the reverie
    when my thoughts become a nonstop bullet train,
    my pen never stops weeping.

    Submitted on 2004-10-26 04:09:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Why do we keep writing?
    Its like penalizing ourselves?
    Exploitation of ourselves.

    It will always be a mystery.
    as long as that wind keeps blowing
    as long as the sun is still shining.
    As long as people continue to fall in love with eachother...we will always write.

    I hope your beauty keeps shining on and on...

    | Posted on 2004-11-05 00:00:00 | by iShoes | [ Reply to This ]
      like this one too, though i'm not sure if 'closed-eyed' is correct. close-eyed? closed-eye? well, whatever it is, nice little piece.
    | Posted on 2004-10-26 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      This reminded me of the roots: 'got blood, got sweat, got tears leaking out of the pen'. Good piece in your usual style with the strong imagery.
    | Posted on 2004-10-26 00:00:00 | by the apocrypha | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't want to dream at the moment cause I dreamt the whole last night and slept terribly. but this poem is a great minimalsitic piece. every word has it's meaning and impact on the reader. nothing's unnecassary. and the whole of it, though only a few words, have a great impact. very well done, Amy.
    | Posted on 2004-10-26 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      this reminds me of when i can't sleep because some poem is rolling 'round in my head and won't leave me alone until i get up and write write write! i don't think i often seem rhyming from you, although this isn't forced rhyming at all. it's like you said in the last line, it just weeps from your pen! well done! i hope you are getting some sleep, though...
    | Posted on 2004-10-26 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]

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