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    dots Submission Name: Whole in the walldots
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    Author: Vibrant
    Elite Ratio:    2.7 - 855/538/131
    Words: 26
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsWhole in the walldots
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    I ain't clever.
    I don't know a thing.
    Maybe I ought to give in.
    And be my own sin thing,
    therefore one would
    sing within.




    Submitted on 2004-10-26 11:03:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked the flow of this fairly short piece but to me, the words that you have included, when all put together, don't actually make much sense and I see no relevance in the title at all. I'm sorry, but maybe I just couldn't get my head round this piece and a little explanation could go a long way...
    | Posted on 2004-10-26 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]
      sweet. I thought it made perfect sense, especially the rather clever title. The idea of letting go to live inside... everything free but in a confined space... wow you gave me a lot to think about. Heh, reminded me of that book, Woman in the Wall...

    One thing, though, I didn't like the ain't too much, I dunno it set the tone of the poem in a wierd way that doesn't fit with anything else. But it flowed like ... like ... like something flowy after that! ~Corazzzz
    | Posted on 2004-10-26 00:00:00 | by Cora Windover | [ Reply to This ]


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