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    Author: shaman
    ASL Info:    32/m/Holland,MI
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 821/406/72
    Words: 459
    Class/Type: Story/Misc
    Total Views: 1576
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    Bytes: 2760



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       I have been very uninspired so I decided to write down the improv from Sunday. Enjoy


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    I was walking and talking down the street
    Suddenly I felt something bearing down on my feet
    Looking down at concrete
    I saw a turtle wearing a girdle; In it’s mouth a receipt
    It said “hear is your receipt sir, for the groceries you bought earlier today, with the money that was stolen from the offering plate, while Reverend Hilks drank a glass of milk and prayed that one day every sinner would become a saint.”
    I tried to explain “ I said “listen here turtle Reverend Hilks is corrupt
    Yesterday I saw he and miss Daisy
    Enter a motel with handcuffs”
    Well, the turtle called my bluff and shrieked “It’s a lie”
    He tucked his head in his shell
    I started to cry
    I couldn’t believe I was outwitted by a turtle, especially not one wearing a girdle
    So I picked up the turtle and put it in my backpack
    In between my shoes and an old hacky sac
    Stuffed with beans
    Full of holes
    Resembling a screen door
    Unable to close
    My eyes
    The sun shining brightly over head
    Hanging over in sheets; lucid dream’s of last night’s bed
    I trip
    Falling over a Bush Cheney sign
    Mouth full of magic mushrooms
    I mush them into moments
    Swallowing stems of psylobins and their cap components
    My backpack opens
    The turtle walks out
    The sprinklers turn on the lawn
    It starts spawning like a trout
    Soon grass begins to grow in places where it shouldn’t
    My hair turns to grass
    My hand become wooden
    Cotton crowds my mouth
    Shoving my teeth aside
    Soured by the bitter taste my tongue decides to hide
    I stand up and brush myself off
    Coughing out tiny rainbows
    Combing through my grassy hair
    I shake grains of dirty prose
    “Spare me your introductions” I say to a black squirrel passing by
    He shook his head and hurled an acorn at my eye,
    Luckily I dodged it and he ran up a tree
    Only after challenging me to a spelling be
    He said spell “epileptic”
    “As in the seizure of the day? I ask
    I spelled it,
    Tied my tennis shoes, sipping vodka from a flask
    I ask myself “who am I?”
    “Who?” an owl echoes back
    I try to find my tongue so that I can react
    My tongue has gone back to hiding
    In the bottom of my mouth
    Rolling like a marble
    Thoughts migrate south
    It’s time to go to sleep now
    Crimson sun is setting overhead
    So I climb on into lucid dreams of last nights bed
    Head against my pillow
    Billowy white clouds
    I finally close my eyes
    Invoking a black burial shroud




    Submitted on 2004-10-26 14:09:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I certainly couldn't tell you were lacking inspiriation in this wild and wacky wonderful piece!

    I liked the talking animals and the wonderland feel of the piece - great job!

    Thanks for the laugh!

    love,peace,joy&smiles to share

    tif
    | Posted on 2007-07-13 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      This had me cracking up and was very Alice in Wonderly as in wonderfully done. Great little diddy and seems your uninspiration was very inspired underneath. I am now wondering what the turtle and all represent and why they were sent. he he he
    Good job & thanks for lightening the day! Love, Peace, Joy!!!
    | Posted on 2004-10-26 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      i thought it was funny... and then 'Falling over a Bush Cheney sign' was the best... last sunday I saw this drunk kid running from the police and yes he did fall his drunk ass over a kerry-edwards sign. Good improv.
    | Posted on 2004-10-26 00:00:00 | by Alize | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm really glad this is the first thing I read at Elite today. You must have quite an imagination! I loved the turtle wearing a girdle and the squirrel that threw an acorn at your eye. Nice fun read, keep it up.
    | Posted on 2004-10-26 00:00:00 | by WaxingPoetic | [ Reply to This ]
      Shanam this is a most ambitious and bold piece you have written (You must share those mushrooms next time) I enjoyed the trip very much. You should proof read again i 'spelling bee'. and a couple other small things but that did not take away from this Alice in wonderland work you have created. Bravo!
    | Posted on 2004-10-26 00:00:00 | by dmm | [ Reply to This ]
      WELL WELL...guees what?...my girl would LOVE this...yes she shall.
    Thank you...wow
    this is such a shock coming from you...awsome none the less.
    This is so...too cool for school my Tan would say...and I think I will use her words as this makes me wish she wasn't at school but here ejoying this with me...
    I'll print it and show later.
    'Cotton crowds my mouth'...just one of the many killer lines man...wow
    this is too sweet...what a tale!
    Watching you
    Thanks for the great read for my kid and myself!
    kelly
    | Posted on 2004-10-28 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]


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