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    dots Submission Name: Good Lovin (R)dots
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    Author: Brownsdelight
    ASL Info:    25/F/NUEVO MEXICO
    Elite Ratio:    4.43 - 1251/1055/115
    Words: 268
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 1581
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1599



    Description:
       Yes I'm tipping the moral scales again with yet another erotic write. Just a lil something to get the ol "creative" juices flowing. I hope you all enjoy. And for those of you who were shy the first time....Go ahead induldge. lol


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    dotsGood Lovin (R)dots
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    I want to make you feel pleasure from your head down to your toes.
    I want to kiss and caress while watching your love grow.

    I want to feel every inch of you on my lips
    I want your hands to explore-make my body tingle n twitch.

    I want you all night. There are no rules in my game.
    From position to position. I want to hear you call my name.

    I don't want it gentle- there's plenty time later for loving.
    Just grab my hair, spank my ass. Harder! YEA I'm cumming!

    I want it so wet, mmmmm like a warm waterfall.
    No need in being bashful. I wanna try it all.

    It's been far too long. My body's been too long calling
    Place your head between my thigh's. Catch me...I'm falling.

    Tonight there is nothing but us between the sheets.
    No worries, no hassles, just good lovin till we're weak.

    My body is a sacrifice, I offer it to you.
    Touch it. Lick it. Kiss it. Wait a minute I'm not through.

    It's my turn now to make your body ache.
    I'm gonna rub, kiss n lick till I get a warm milk shake.

    I'll gently run my tongue up and down the length of your back.
    Then turn you over, climb on top. Mmmmm baby you like that?

    On and on, and on again. I have no plans to stop.
    Baby we won't be through till I've gotten your every last drop.

    By XOXOXBD


    2004 XOXOXBD (All rights reserved)




    Submitted on 2004-10-26 14:55:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Girl, you gon make me come find your little freaky a$$. Mission accomplished if you were attempting to arouse a man stuck at work. Chocolate kisses doesn't blurt everything out like this does. Not saying that I wouldn't want those chocolate kisses and everything else that comes with them. Anyway boo, keep doing what ya doing and I'm gon' keep reading.
    | Posted on 2005-02-01 00:00:00 | by xtremegentleman | [ Reply to This ]
      this is cool. well i like chocolate kisses better. but this is good too. i think this needs a little more description. although the "warm milkshake" line was pretty alright.

    Rain
    | Posted on 2005-02-01 00:00:00 | by Rain | [ Reply to This ]
      wow this is a fantastic poem props to a girl who isnt afraid to say it like it is. everyone on this site is thinking and feelings the same thing. you inspired me to not be afraid to write what i am truly feeling inside. the lust the passion everything is so greatly overwhelming i compliment every other piece you have written and i hope you keep writing what you feel.
    | Posted on 2004-12-25 00:00:00 | by withouthope | [ Reply to This ]
      YaY ! ...congrats on having the guts to say what others want to hear and wont admit to...I thought it was fantastic ...but im having trouble trying to comment without oozing pun ...but here goes ...
    It "flowed" well
    You really sexspress yourself well ...*wait* ..err express...

    Umm ...Keep them cumming ..coming ...

    Im going to have a shower :o

    This is a fave ...Blessed be
    Krysti
    | Posted on 2004-12-18 00:00:00 | by Krysti | [ Reply to This ]
      EROTIC! I think you could get this published in Hustler! This is hot stuff...very blatant...I like that about you...! Bear it all girl! See, now if YOU wore a slutty costume for Halloween, I'd be like..."That's cool, cause she's just expressing her inner-self!"...

    You know, this is an odd comment, but I almost hear this as a Chaka Khan melody...

    Cool, good job! We need more pieces around here with cumming in them...bravo!
    | Posted on 2004-10-26 00:00:00 | by marysunshine | [ Reply to This ]
      I personally liked your 1st one better, I liked this but the other one seemed to have more flow.
    P.s. It's been far too long. My body's been too long calling
    The use of too long twice is a bit overplayed, give the reader something else to work with.
    Good work!
    -Andrya
    | Posted on 2004-10-26 00:00:00 | by andrya | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this was even better than the last one I read! I think I got over the shock of how explicit your poems are because I Enjoyed it without guilt! I'll be looking forward to reading more of your poems.
    | Posted on 2004-10-26 00:00:00 | by devonbracy | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked the raw explicitness of this...although I tend to like my erotica to be more about conveying the feelings of things rather than just describing them...I didn't get aroused by the words in this because I couldn't step into the piece and feel them.
    But in general, the style of this was consistant throughout and was pretty good...
    | Posted on 2004-10-27 00:00:00 | by Emerging Soul | [ Reply to This ]
      Pulp poetry indeed.some of your lines were a little elementary,"warm milk shake" not even a vulcano reference.I'm impressed. Dont have a public toilet to graffiti?
    | Posted on 2004-10-26 00:00:00 | by vvv | [ Reply to This ]


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