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Caller ID

Author: mimi
ASL Info:    30/f/ny
Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 597 /390 /111
Words: 91
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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payback is a bitch

Caller ID

The phone rings,
the tone sings,
and the numeric codes brings
the mesage that it was you.
I knew, but I let you stew
in the cold, dark passages of
I left you out there to wonder.
No light to shine the way.
No fights to wash away.
Nothing for you to hold.
NOw I sit here
waiting, debating,
if you're out there mating.
You're ignoring the rings and
the message that the numeric number

Submitted on 2004-10-26 23:29:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Comments a very funny person...i dont usually like rhyming stuff..but i really liked has a great wit and a great humor to it.

i also like it because i geuss i know where you comeing from...doesn't every one?

flipside milo
| Posted on 2005-04-13 00:00:00 | by milo stills | [ Reply to This ]
  Point very well taken and you are right, paybacks are a [censored]. I have to say this is an interesting way to get your message across.
Unmistakingly clear and to the point.
| Posted on 2005-04-03 00:00:00 | by dr_tigger | [ Reply to This ]
  interesting twist in this poem! great job. i can tell you are a very experienced writer. i know you will go far and wish you great luck!
| Posted on 2005-03-27 00:00:00 | by MMISS | [ Reply to This ]
  oh the games people frustrating...but i am as guilty of the "i wont answer just yet" thing as the next nice, that you are candid enough to remind that, as you stated payback is a bytch! nice poem.
| Posted on 2005-03-23 00:00:00 | by stolie77 | [ Reply to This ]
  You do have a signiture style to your writing,which is awesome to see.

Yes, we all have been there and done that,but I thought it was so kool the twist of the table turning,bravo
| Posted on 2005-03-03 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]
  Oh this is well done and the message is quite clear. I really enjoyed this and am not sure that there's anything I'd change except the capitalized O in NOw. I really didn't expect the ending to be him turning the tables.
| Posted on 2004-10-26 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
  i think that this was good and that it had a great message. answer the phone. good work and you did well with the rhyming lia
| Posted on 2004-10-26 00:00:00 | by lili | [ Reply to This ]
  Reminded me of the Blink 182 song, What's My Age Again, making prank phone calls from a pay phone.
We all leave little signatures that can be traced back. Some are more obvious than others.
Good luck with all you write,
| Posted on 2004-10-27 00:00:00 | by Sandburg | [ Reply to This ]
  i hate caller ID! any of those added "perks" on the phone just make everyone a little crazier! your poem just re-iterates that for me! bummer!
| Posted on 2004-10-30 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]

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