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    dots Submission Name: Autumn Leaves are Fallingdots
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    Author: PastelSky
    ASL Info:    18/F/In the clouds
    Elite Ratio:    4.24 - 181/223/49
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Misc/Happy
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    Description:
       Once I thought about the whole ordeal of leaves falling from trees (and because of the fall season), it made me realize how similar it was to people who are down, having their bad days and situations, and how sometimes, we step on them without much a care.

    Of course, this isn't true in all cases, though I'm just comparing. Anyway, I wanted a poem that would bring hope to the "falling leaves" that are looked down upon, and I hope I conveyed the message decently with my poem.


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    dotsAutumn Leaves are Fallingdots
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    Autumn leaves are falling,
    falling from the sunny days,
    from the rainy days I've seen so long before.

    A wide array of pastel skies
    are painted at my bedroom window.
    Morning calls out to all the leaves
    that sit upon my front lawn;
    my doorstep.

    How often we step upon these leaves,
    frail and weak and discarded like debris,
    always to fall;
    only to fall.

    Autumn leaves are falling,
    longing for those innocent smiles and
    those happy piles
    we forget about another day.

    But today,
    Autumn leaves are flying;
    Despite the cold,
    Despite the fog,
    Despite the past of bitter tears
    the rain clouds cry in shame,

    Because I know that they are flying,
    and I know
    they always will.




    Submitted on 2004-10-27 00:00:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i really like this.. your comparison is very enlightening.. i think that's the word i'm looking for... the imagery was nice.. i got a feel of the leaves being personified.. in my mind with little faces and tears... don't know what feedback to give.. it seemed pretty good to me.. in the fifth stanza you have most of the lines capitolized, but in the other stanzas your only capitolization was after a period.. is this on purpose? i didn't see meaning in it.. if there is enlighten me...
    | Posted on 2004-10-27 00:00:00 | by besodemuerte | [ Reply to This ]
      I too like the comparisons that you made and although I'm not such a big of free-verse poetry, describtions, and especially nature, make even free-verse poetry get to me. I also have to say that I am one of those falling leaves but people don't really tread on me (as it were), they seem to be trying to put me back. Anyhow, the ending to this piece was really uplifting, and I'd say it was a fitting end to a nice write. Good job.
    | Posted on 2004-10-27 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]
      So Cute, I love how you personify (I think I spelled that wrong) the leaves. How you gave the leaves emothions and personalities is so Great! Usually someone personifies death or love, but leaves is so unique and so brilliant. These leaves reminded me of a character in The Glass Menagarie. I liked this piece so much i must add it to my favorites!
    | Posted on 2004-10-27 00:00:00 | by Celina Chiscolm | [ Reply to This ]


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