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    dots Submission Name: growingdots
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    Author: Dalelord
    Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 22/23/8
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       I quick piece, unrevised, that I wrote for a creative writing class


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    dotsgrowingdots
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    Smashing through the latus
    Of uncanny thoughts
    And taking the fuel
    To pass by the rots
    Was a tour guid of feelings
    That not one can feel
    Was a shifting of self-tension
    On this world at my heel
    A boundry now past
    On to greater things
    As things can get better
    Missing "bad" can begin to ring
    With all good comes bad
    Good reality can't leave the head
    But packing without fuel
    Puts one with the dead




    Submitted on 2004-10-27 00:17:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i think it definitely needs some revision.. a spell check anyways... and i don't know what "latus" is... i liked the beginning.. i think it got lost at the end...
    | Posted on 2004-10-27 00:00:00 | by besodemuerte | [ Reply to This ]


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