Preacher by Dalelord

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Submission Name: Preacher dots

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Author:	Dalelord
Elite Ratio:	4.2 - 22/23/8
Words:	88

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
Total Views:	1662
Average Vote:	4.0000
Bytes:	587

Description:
Another for Creative writing, I thought it was alright. More just fun with words than anything.
Comments are awesome.

Preacher dots

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A song to sing
with a broken string
A cause for something
OF deviance to bring

Not making that chord
Beautiful sounds sound bored
But strike rage into a hoard
From the music that is scored

The rhythm not different
The sound hits the sentiment
Of one missing a crucial hunt
For trust in the government

Extinguished by their mal-dress
I preach to all with great distress
Smiles are on faces in thie mess
Until "real" joy is brought, I will not REST

Submitted on 2004-10-27 00:30:25 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Looks like you had fun. I like the way you rhymed, although, as with most attempts to rhyme, it messes with the rythym. Not too badly in this case though. I'm glad you stated that you did this in fun, because I've wasted myself trying to get a message. Was there one?
I could very easily have missed it being up at this ungodly hour.

I'll be checking you for some serious stuff.
| Posted on 2004-10-27 00:00:00 | by arkay | [ Reply to This ]

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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
It means a lot to them, as it does to you.