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    dots Submission Name: Preacherdots
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    Author: Dalelord
    Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 22/23/8
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1662
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 587



    Description:
       Another for Creative writing, I thought it was alright. More just fun with words than anything.
    Comments are awesome.


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    dotsPreacherdots
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    A song to sing
    with a broken string
    A cause for something
    OF deviance to bring

    Not making that chord
    Beautiful sounds sound bored
    But strike rage into a hoard
    From the music that is scored

    The rhythm not different
    The sound hits the sentiment
    Of one missing a crucial hunt
    For trust in the government

    Extinguished by their mal-dress
    I preach to all with great distress
    Smiles are on faces in thie mess
    Until "real" joy is brought, I will not REST




    Submitted on 2004-10-27 00:30:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Looks like you had fun. I like the way you rhymed, although, as with most attempts to rhyme, it messes with the rythym. Not too badly in this case though. I'm glad you stated that you did this in fun, because I've wasted myself trying to get a message. Was there one?
    I could very easily have missed it being up at this ungodly hour.

    I'll be checking you for some serious stuff.
    | Posted on 2004-10-27 00:00:00 | by arkay | [ Reply to This ]


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