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    dots Submission Name: R*I*P Grandmadots
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    Author: Yella_Bone05
    ASL Info:    18/Grown Ass Woman/Kansas
    Elite Ratio:    3.11 - 65/90/32
    Words: 337
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       I dont care what you think becauze in all reality i didnt write this for you i wrote it for my grandma but it wouldnt hurt to kno how you felt about it.


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    dotsR*I*P Grandmadots
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    Eyes Filled with many tears left uncried
    for the one i lost
    the person that took my heart and soul
    to keep as her own
    to teach me a lesson
    that as long as my heart and soul are gone
    the longer my pain shall last
    til i give up on my hate towards the ones i call family
    but i shall not feel til the only person that made sense
    in my life is back on earth to relieve me of this pain
    and to answer all my unspoken questions
    about the identies of the ones that betrayed our love
    but my expectations are set high for you
    as yours are for me
    i expect you to never change
    u expect the best of me and to overcome the pressures of life and the ones put on me by you and god
    but you never told me that it would be this damn hard to prove my self
    i expect you to always be with me as my courage
    and to never let me fall
    and yet all you want is for me to prove that i am ready to receive that diploma in my hand
    and to never take you for granted
    but the day i took you for granted was the very same day that Grandpa J.R and Mikey took your
    hand and told you that your place in heaven was ready
    But see i dont blame them for loving you so much that they couldnt bare another second without by their side
    im just mad becauze they took you when i needed you the most and leaving me here on earth with Mary
    as my punishment for taking you for granted
    and now that im on my own i realize that
    its jus me against the world
    and that my life will never be the same if GrandMa Bess aint in it tellin everyone to
    "Kiss MY Ass"

    "In Godz World Nothing Happens By Mistake"
    "R*I*P GrandMa"




    Submitted on 2004-10-28 16:43:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      your grandmother sounds like a great women and a strong women and i know she meant alot to you and the more we talk i see shes were you get your strength from and in the end i know your a strong women and i hope you keep me around long enough to see just how strong you get.

    Much Love
    G-man
    | Posted on 2006-02-01 00:00:00 | by Sexy_wolf_2 | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem i liked very much
    Know your Grandma is with you every step of the way
    Shes in your heart forever
    she sounds like she was a beautiful woman who loved her granddaughter very much

    I too had a very deep love with my grandma
    I called her my mema on my left arm is the word mema tatooed on it to last forever

    God Bless You
    Ron

    I will pray for you and your grandma
    | Posted on 2005-10-20 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this is a very well written poem. This is an excellent tribute to your grandmother, and a very clear portrayal of how you feel now. If you'd like a bit of advise on life from a stranger, I suggest you make Grandma proud and let go of the anger. I know that isn't easy, and that family is NOT dictated by blood, but it's the best way to heal. Also remember that your grandmother is always with you, looking out for you.

    I found one mistake in the 8'th line from the bottom (not counting the line that only says to). You left out a word in this line. Other than that, very good write.
    | Posted on 2005-01-17 00:00:00 | by ebflannery | [ Reply to This ]
      I often wonder why we are so angry when those closest to our hearts pass on? I am like you I hold a grudge with the dead. I hope that in time you will learn to let go of some of your anger and find the peace I'm sure your Grandma would want.
    | Posted on 2004-10-28 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
      thanxxx and soon i will let go of my anger but my anger is not with My grandma. My anger is For My family for they are the reason for her death
    | Posted on 2004-10-28 00:00:00 | by Yella_Bone05 | [ Reply to This ]
      Well this brings up a good point but the thing is when someone dies close to them some people commit suicide and that i don't know why but don't grieve for to long other wise it might get to your head i'm not saying dont be sad or mad but don't let one thing bring you down cause a bumpy road will eventually turn smooth

    peace
    | Posted on 2004-10-28 00:00:00 | by rising_dreams | [ Reply to This ]


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