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    dots Submission Name: travelling my pathdots
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    Author: brokenmuse
    ASL Info:    26/F/AL
    Elite Ratio:    3.29 - 756/734/161
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Poetry/Vampire
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    dotstravelling my pathdots
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    ticking down to death
    my contrary clock hands
    they tick to an end
    that I won't see
    engulfed in my sea
    of immortality
    swallowed like a pill
    like longing
    I don't require
    yet every night
    I flee to the streets
    to sate a bottomless hunger
    looking to dance
    looking to find
    a partner
    a victim
    the flow of life
    to make it mine
    to be one with a beautiful....
    a beautiful death
    flowered and savage
    beautiful and freeing
    but even as the life
    of the innocent in my arms
    I find the knowledge
    that I will never see an end
    I will travel
    down the curving path
    of time
    free of illness or death
    but a vampire nonetheless
    who will never see
    the smile of the sun




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