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    dots Submission Name: Rants and Musings, Episode Twodots

    Author: max
    ASL Info:    27 m tennessee
    Elite Ratio:    3.5 - 152/191/55
    Words: 211
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
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    dotsRants and Musings, Episode Twodots

    a single rant,

    If you've ever had just one good day on earth, then, no matter if you have a thousand bad days after that, you've still had the best life has to offer.

    From Tennessee

    a musing for Tennessee, and how she came to me,
    a mother---

    she was a mother to me,
    a musing for her is a musing to be---
    a single rant for your mother

    here is a rant that is sure to discover
    the lover that your mother was

    on a single night of rants and musings,
    about the time of the erect clock,
    a shadow opens from the floor,
    the clock jumps it's springs,
    your mother asks for more.
    then from the cupboard she pulls out a piece
    of her homemade stuffin' while I give the dog
    some lovin' as I pet it,
    and as the fire warms my ass,
    your mother and I are having a good time,
    when once the clock strikes three
    her panties on the floor I do see!!!

    panty droppin' from your mother is good

    she bopped on my cock,
    we fucked and we rocked,
    I fucked her like a good tennis match---
    swift rod in her ass ~

    Submitted on 2004-10-29 14:32:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i really didn't know what to think when i first read this. It is good in it's own right, however it seems a little unorganized... probably why it is clearly stated that this is a rant... (silly me). I do have a question though... the part that says "From Tennessee".. is that the title of the 2nd rant listed here...it just seemed a little broken up and i wasn't sure what phrases were supposed to be grouped here...

    back to the actual message here... it is quite funny and blunt (which is a good thing). I think that the "in your face", piont blank tone displayed by your choice of words here is relevant...

    good work

    - fifi
    | Posted on 2004-10-29 00:00:00 | by halopop | [ Reply to This ]

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