Description: Just something i wrote for art class. we had to draw a picture to illistrate a poem. i drew a girl in a tattered dress with tears streaming down her face. its a prety good drawing if i do say so myself. oh yeah the poem. um, just tell me what you think!
Illusions Of Me -------------------------------------------
Theres a lonely little girl
Lost inside my mind
Through fantasy worlds
Lost in my fake reality
A helpless little child
Her tattered dress shifting in an imaginary Breeze
Reflecting her broken heart
She pulls herself in close
So as to not lose her sanity
Hoping she'll be saved
Because she knows this isn't reality
You wrote this really well. You wrote it so that the reader could actually picture what you were saying in the poem. It was well written and I dont think that I would change anything in it. keep it up.
I feel as if I know this little girl. I've heard her crying before. I know her so well because she is like the little girl inside of me. She keeps crying out. She's losing herself. But each passing moment I know is she is lost a little bit more. .. Anyways, on to the important stuff.. Your work is solid. You never deviate from the subject at hand, her eternal sadness. I think its beatifully brooding.