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    dots Submission Name: Three Wishesdots
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    Author: Timmy S. Edgar
    ASL Info:    38 male Melb, Australia
    Elite Ratio:    2.6 - 263/200/71
    Words: 32
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 1280
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    Description:
       just a fleeting thought


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    dotsThree Wishesdots
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    Wishes if i had three,
    For sure they would be,

    Inexaustable love for you & me,

    for us, love, peace & harmony,

    And for you, Wishes three




    Submitted on 2004-03-10 02:01:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a very very very very short poem indeed, but very emotional and sincere too.

    I read many very short poems on this site but this one the best eventhough I don't like very short poems because it's not fair to judge on a writer upon reading three or four lines!

    Very emotional and sincere words
    "Inexaustable love for you & me,
    for us, love, peace & harmony"

    Good job and keep it up.
    | Posted on 2004-12-19 00:00:00 | by Yousef | [ Reply to This ]
      Lived this one..would not break the lines into so many diff stanzas though. Looks like lack of structure... Generous thoughts of love.
    jan
    | Posted on 2004-03-10 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
      now, this is generous - giving three wishes for the one you love. this one was very sweet.
    | Posted on 2004-03-10 00:00:00 | by Judy | [ Reply to This ]
      ......sweet love..oh if i if i..great write and generous soul.......
    | Posted on 2004-03-10 00:00:00 | by Krucible | [ Reply to This ]
      hmmm... I liked the rhymes, they fit very well I like that you wanted to wish for wishes for the other person that shows true love and feeling the fact that you are willing to give somethng very valuable up for the person you love, that is love right there. good work and I hope to read more.
    | Posted on 2004-03-10 00:00:00 | by hidden lady | [ Reply to This ]
      Ahh, short --but as long as it needs to be to express your lovely caring fantasy. Thanks, Silver
    | Posted on 2004-03-10 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]


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