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    Author: ariadne
    Elite Ratio:    4.11 - 99/85/26
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Oh, to look down upon the city
    When trapped in a rural nightmare
    And if the smog starts to get to you
    Oh, to breathe the ocean air

    The need to hold another
    Is strong when it wants to be
    When love has lost intrinsic worth
    Wish to fly and to be free

    When the party is your whole life
    Quiet is farthest from your thoughts
    Then all the friends get so blasť
    It was solitude you sought




    Submitted on 2004-10-29 22:16:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like the first and second paragraph. The second was good, but somehow it didn't fit...I don't know why. It contributes to the theme of the thing, though. Good job.
    | Posted on 2004-10-29 00:00:00 | by Abby Sinthetic | [ Reply to This ]
      i enjoyed this very much, although some lines should be separated with more punctuation. also, some parts dont flow as well as others, but as i said, i thought this was excellent
    | Posted on 2004-10-29 00:00:00 | by justalyssa | [ Reply to This ]


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