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your song

Author: bite my lip
ASL Info:    20/f/nc
Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 59 /79 /12
Words: 63
Class/Type: Lyrics /Longing
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your song

these broken fingers,
that are still bloody from the brick,
still strum the strings.

this broken voice,
that is pained from holding back words,
will still sing.

the bloodshot eyes,
that flow black rain,
will still look into yours.

and this shattered heart,
bleeding for you,
is still yours to keep.

i no longer need it.
i am numb.

Submitted on 2004-10-30 01:33:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  its called your song but really it almost could be your life... its almost like the singer doesnt care enough about their own being to live their life for themselves but rather its all for 'you'
the pain and brokenness and abuse and yet still its all for 'you'
and why...?

i no longer need it.
i am numb.

the honesty of those lines but also the surrender... almost the entrapment... like you've given up on finding someone to treat you right... a very sad song but very powerful too...
| Posted on 2004-11-07 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
  sounds like a cool little diddy.,
thats not the whole song though right?
I like the ending,
I think if this is the whole song maybe you should add a chorus or two and a few more verses,
| Posted on 2004-10-30 00:00:00 | by Broken Angel | [ Reply to This ]

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