Fall

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Fall

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Falling leaves make a beautiful color scene leaving people to rake them up into piles and little kids to jump in them All of the colors representing what kind of tree they are from letting people collect them to press into books Leaves being stepped on have a crunchy sound making it sound interesting to our ears Loud sounds of trees when the wind goes through them and the trees sway

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Heh makes me think of all my younger years during fall time. When I would jump in the leaves and just go mwhahahahaha! Lol. Being young was so fun and interesting and I remember putting my leaves in a book and watching the breeze. Beautiful poem, for an majestic season.

| Posted on 2005-11-21 00:00:00 | by winterdove | [ Reply to This ]

A beautiful write of yours yet again I like how you reflect a lot of things in your poems to youth It shows a love and caring for those younger then you that need your help and guidance Keep It Up! Take Care Ron Keep In Touch Bye the way i signed on to the shoutbox the other night and noticed that you were there like 2 hours before me if you ever wanna chat in there just let me know Take Care Ron

| Posted on 2005-10-25 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]

This was a good poem. i love fall, it's my favorite time of the year. All of the leaves, so many diferent colors, Halloween... As for ideas, I can't think of any at the moment, but I'll get back to you on them. Great job. Keep it up.

| Posted on 2005-10-15 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]

this was a nice fall poem - especially when it's near 100 here today! I liked the descriptions and it made me want to run and play in the leaves! Love,Peace,Joy!

| Posted on 2005-06-30 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]

this is a nice description poem. I can see a fall scene very clearly. But I think that you might not like it so much because it doesn't have any meaning behind it. You didn't show us why you chose to write about them, or why they are beautiful or ugly or hopeful or depressing... you just wrote what you saw and not what you felt. I think that's the difference behind writing and art.

| Posted on 2004-12-12 00:00:00 | by mixedemotions00 | [ Reply to This ]

I enjoyed reading this, because it seemed me like it was a break from all the everyday feelings and I could sit back and take a look at what was happening outside of my head, nice imagery and I can't really improve it! Sorry!

| Posted on 2004-11-12 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]

i thought that it was a good fall poem. the imagrey was nice and it read well. for an idea, " loud are the sounds of the trees as autumn's cool breeze flows gently through them and they sway to the falling music." overall, i thought that it was good. keep it up.

| Posted on 2004-10-30 00:00:00 | by maquiladora | [ Reply to This ]

i adore the fall and all the colors! i used to love jumping in leaves when i was a kid... still do! tighten this up a little... here's my suggestion: Fall leaves make a beautiful color scene, leaving people to rake them into piles for little children to jump in. All of the colors represent what kind of tree they come from, urging people to collect them to press into books. Leaves being stepped on have a crunchy sound, making it interesting to our ears. The wind passes through them, and the trees sway. just a suggestion, but your poem reminded me of why i love the fall so much! yeah!

| Posted on 2004-10-30 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]

i lovesfalls theres alot you could do with this some nice thoughts of fall...not the usual just the description of the poem...magnihas a good ideas...just expand on you initial thoughts...making it sound more poetic...i really like the idea of people pressing them into books never heard that in a fall poem...i still love jumping inthe leaves and the wonderful smells around this time of year...i would just take each line and like i said expand on the initial thoughts...smiles purps

| Posted on 2004-10-31 00:00:00 | by purplesun24 | [ Reply to This ]

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