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    dots Submission Name: Invisible Lovedots

    Author: batgirl
    Elite Ratio:    4.73 - 67/66/17
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       For my love, that I can never have.. who I hold so close in my dreams.. and can never see with my waking eyes...

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    dotsInvisible Lovedots

    Two shadows in the dark, with longing in their hearts..
    Kissing with their minds, it's whats in their hearts that bind..
    An enchanting laugh, touch they do not have..
    Lips brushed across the eyes, this desire cannot be disguised..
    There is all the time for teasing, when it's the other that one is pleasing..
    Gazes locked tight, this feeling you do not fight..
    Passion brings them close, the whispers hurt the most..
    In your eyes her body is exposed, no time for her to be composed..
    So strong without a word, listen to what you've never heard...

    Submitted on 2004-10-30 17:19:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I feel like you have described my feelings, my own mental experience in this poem, this writing has truly touched my heart. It is mysterious and and yes, quite erotic! And it's wonderful. It will be one of my favourites here, this writing is really excellent.
    Respect and all the best wishes to you.
    | Posted on 2005-01-08 00:00:00 | by Dana | [ Reply to This ]
      I was attracted to the tittle of the poem "Invisible Love", -Which is a very beautiful tittle by the way- The poem is so simple and so emotional too. A new style for me, as I haven't read a poem of that rhyming before but I really liked it specially the part saying
    "Passion brings them close, the whispers hurt the most.." and the finale is very good too
    "In your eyes her body is exposed, no time for her to be composed..

    So strong without a word, listen to what you've never heard..." , Good job and keep it up.
    | Posted on 2004-10-30 00:00:00 | by Yousef | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the way you expressed your feelings! Very well done. I aslo like the idea of the Invisible Love, beacause what you've done here isn't talking about simple flirting you've actually managed to discribe, Invisible Love! Amazing!! Very good!
    | Posted on 2004-10-30 00:00:00 | by Laveina | [ Reply to This ]
      This is exactly how it is when two lovers depart for the night. They are still together in their minds and dreams. You dida good job portraying this. I like this.
    | Posted on 2004-10-30 00:00:00 | by hotrodruss | [ Reply to This ]

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