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    dots Submission Name: When you faildots
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    Author: Star_searcher
    ASL Info:    17/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.25 - 114/109/20
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Misc/Venting
    Total Views: 1241
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    Bytes: 726



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       This was more for me than for anyone else to read. I'm not really sure where I'm coming from, think it might be feelings about an old friend ... not sure.


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    dotsWhen you faildots
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    I need to tell someone this, the way I feel, everytime I see you fail.
    Deep inside of me I feel satisfaction,
    I told you you couldn't do this without me.

    I was your rock, I kept you strong,
    Look at you now .... where are you heading.

    I don't want to feel this but hey I just do,
    Suppose there is some hatred inside when I look at you.

    It's not that I WANT you to fail,
    I just like it when you do.
    Knowing it's no fault of mine,
    And that if you still had me you would be fine.

    So there you have it, the real feelings,
    Bet you don't like that but reality check ... I don't like you.




    Submitted on 2004-10-31 16:27:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      to me it seems as though you do still care about this person and that you still want to help. maybe you should try telling that person that you still care. just my opinion. nice display of fellings lia
    | Posted on 2004-10-31 00:00:00 | by lili | [ Reply to This ]
      Probly not the right emotion but I thought this was funny. Honestly, I think you really do want this person to fail, just give in to that feeling, especially since it seems like whatever happened was a while ago. I know what that feeling is like, the feeling of satisfaction. I went to a wedding yesterday and the bride put the ring on the groom's right hand instead of left and since I don't like either one of them, I felt this great satisfaction inside about the mistake she made... how sad is that? I usually don't say "I can relate to this" but today I will say it, because I really do relate to this. By the way, the last four words is what made me laugh. Good stuff It's like you're saying "hey guess what?"... "so there!"
    | Posted on 2004-10-31 00:00:00 | by WaxingPoetic | [ Reply to This ]
      i really liked this. im the same way in that when i try to help someone and they kick me to the curb..it gives me a bit of satisfaction when i can say i was right and you were wrong..but i think everybody's that way. good poem, but i found it a little odd that you're not sure who it's for..or maybe you really do?
    | Posted on 2004-10-31 00:00:00 | by w0rdz_0f_wizd0m | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the I Told You So Effect... I say it and think it a lot. And it's one of the sneakiest, guiltiest pleasures in the world too. At least for me it is, but I'm a corrupt, evil person, and nobody will want to be my friend after hearing this.
    I think it's just groovy that you brought the subject up and wrote poetry about it, and the poetry was nice n decent too.
    ~peace
    | Posted on 2004-10-31 00:00:00 | by Alize | [ Reply to This ]


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