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    dots Submission Name: Pessimisticdots
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    Author: Abby Sinthetic
    Elite Ratio:    2.75 - 177/230/53
    Words: 66
    Class/Type: Misc/
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    Description:
       Punctuation is bad. Part is a bit "femminazi-ish."
    I don't know....


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    dotsPessimisticdots
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    Isolation has eaten my heart
    as the darkness has claimed my skin
    I am dead inside

    Love does not exist
    greed is the driving force
    No one is ever selfless

    Boys will be boys
    and so they are rewarded
    But if girls are real
    they're disowned

    People are spiteful and mean
    The inhuman is all we can trust
    people can only feel.




    Submitted on 2004-10-31 22:44:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      you flourish much more at the darker side of poetry, my dear... i read 'optimistic', and it just doesn't have that awesome Abby ring to it. very poignant ending to this. I might consider revising the 'I am dead inside' line- horribly overused. i absolutely love the last two lines. brilliant. and true. *md*
    | Posted on 2004-12-20 00:00:00 | by MerryDeath | [ Reply to This ]
      VERY VERY COOL...but a bit short...I really enjoyed:

    "People are spiteful and mean
    The inhuman is all we can trust
    people can only feel."

    it was something about it that i liked, even though the whole damn thing was good..
    Well again good write and hope to see more...bye,
    | Posted on 2004-10-31 00:00:00 | by medicated | [ Reply to This ]
      WOW! (though im completely sure i just read an untitled optimist piece from you) i love this! i mean like really... i cannot tell you a fave line coz theyre all damn brilliant! i loved the boys are rewarded for being boys but girls are disowned... too true! inhuman is all we can trust coz ppl can only feel... god... your bl00dy brilliant! like seriously... worship you!
    love does not exist greed is the driving force no one is ever selfless... (haha would you look at me... i ended up quoting the whole poem almost... lol!) but ooo... so true... well its true for me today anyways... hopefully it wont always be true else what the hell is the point (and that my friends would be why this write is called Pessimistic... haha! drum roll please!) right... this must be THE most crap comment ever (if the guidelines have anything to do with anything...) so i apologize for that but PLEASE believe me when i say that i love this write!
    | Posted on 2004-11-01 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      that third part is really deep and true, made me think of a few girls i know. I think love exists though, I think a lot of people don't know what it is or settle for something less and try to call it love. keep up with this stuff, this soul searching, it's good stuff;)
    | Posted on 2004-11-01 00:00:00 | by joe quinn | [ Reply to This ]


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