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    dots Submission Name: Darkness.dots
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    Author: Abby Sinthetic
    Elite Ratio:    2.75 - 177/230/53
    Words: 57
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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       There must be something wrong with me. Maybe it's the bjork.


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    dotsDarkness.dots
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    I hear the wind howl
    And the darkness
    swallows me whole.

    I see the moon glow
    As the darkness
    calls out my name.

    As the stars sing
    As the wolf cries
    in the night
    The darkness beckons to me

    And I cannot help feeling
    insignificant,
    when compared to all around me
    in the night.




    Submitted on 2004-11-01 22:55:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      great write the answer to your comment question is i hid my writing ability for 41 years i never wrote a thing until 9 11 bombings in the states
    anyway your post was good a nice view of my favorite part of the day
    sandman
    | Posted on 2005-06-21 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      what a downer:P but i thought bjork always like smiled? a slightly "i'm from a different planet"smile but still:) being different always makes us feel small and insignificant...hmm..I thought i had an answer or some advice there but damn if I didn't forget it...just keep writing.
    | Posted on 2004-11-02 00:00:00 | by joe quinn | [ Reply to This ]
      Hm. I woulda used the word darkness in the last stanza. It was building up alot of potential energy all through the thing. Ya and bjork is bad for your brain - she's nuts and wants you to be too. Its silly to compare yourself to anything in my opinion - simply understand yourself, buecase its otherwise apples and oranges...
    shard
    | Posted on 2004-11-02 00:00:00 | by particularshard | [ Reply to This ]
      i cannot help but notice that at first it seemed this poem was going to be rhymed but somewhere it got all distorted, actually only the first stanza was rhymed. i think that it is good when we are able to express ourselves in the shortest way possible and you have tried. i really did not understand it, perhaps you can enlighten me, but itt is true darkness makes everyone insignificant, initially i thought this would be about goth and stuff but it ain't. nice piece tho i think it can give us more emotion if you work on it a lil more. coz what is poetry without emotion? the loneliness and kind of sadness i felt- was that intended-jus asking
    | Posted on 2004-11-01 00:00:00 | by nevender | [ Reply to This ]
      im loving the insignificance... i know this too well... like really... in comparison to everything else you are nothing... not in a suicidal no one loves me kinda way but just in a in the grand scheme of things your hardly even here in comparison to the forever of darkness etc...
    seriously... loving your stuff... i think im gonna be your number one stalker... and if Bjork makes you write amazingly like this then never stop listening! see ya round!
    | Posted on 2004-11-01 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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