great write the answer to your comment question is i hid my writing ability for 41 years i never wrote a thing until 9 11 bombings in the states anyway your post was good a nice view of my favorite part of the day sandman
what a downer:P but i thought bjork always like smiled? a slightly "i'm from a different planet"smile but still:) being different always makes us feel small and insignificant...hmm..I thought i had an answer or some advice there but damn if I didn't forget it...just keep writing.
Hm. I woulda used the word darkness in the last stanza. It was building up alot of potential energy all through the thing. Ya and bjork is bad for your brain - she's nuts and wants you to be too. Its silly to compare yourself to anything in my opinion - simply understand yourself, buecase its otherwise apples and oranges... shard
i cannot help but notice that at first it seemed this poem was going to be rhymed but somewhere it got all distorted, actually only the first stanza was rhymed. i think that it is good when we are able to express ourselves in the shortest way possible and you have tried. i really did not understand it, perhaps you can enlighten me, but itt is true darkness makes everyone insignificant, initially i thought this would be about goth and stuff but it ain't. nice piece tho i think it can give us more emotion if you work on it a lil more. coz what is poetry without emotion? the loneliness and kind of sadness i felt- was that intended-jus asking
im loving the insignificance... i know this too well... like really... in comparison to everything else you are nothing... not in a suicidal no one loves me kinda way but just in a in the grand scheme of things your hardly even here in comparison to the forever of darkness etc... seriously... loving your stuff... i think im gonna be your number one stalker... and if Bjork makes you write amazingly like this then never stop listening! see ya round!