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    dots Submission Name: The Perfect Degree of Insomniadots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 43
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       It's not new. I'm not sleeping. I'm not happy today. This is far from my best work, seriously. Blah, blah, blah.


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    dotsThe Perfect Degree of Insomniadots
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    I'm hoping for the perfect degree of sleeplessness,
    for with too much sleep,
    creativity is a dream.
    Past a certain degree of insomnia
    I only think of sleep,
    but with the proper balance,
    my ingenuity is a rapid train
    with no brakes.




    Submitted on 2004-11-02 09:13:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I loved this! The ingenuity behind this is very blatantly real. It is fun to try and control what people think about sleeping with words, like you did. Very good
    | Posted on 2004-11-10 00:00:00 | by Grey Eyes | [ Reply to This ]
      I am currently on hour 73 of no sleep- a bit worse for wear BUT I read thys and feel- yes- EMPOWERED and CHARGED! Sweet deal- balance acquired, breaks- an afterthought!
    | Posted on 2004-11-04 00:00:00 | by Six_Grey | [ Reply to This ]
      sleep is completely overrated though i know what you are talking about... that stage when you are just always thinking about sleep... always conscious that you arent getting any but that you want to... ive decided i should start thinking about sleep more coz it seems to be the closest i shall EVER get to it! haha! how damn sad...
    im loving the train without breaks... the thinking without reproof... pure unsensored you... i love the shyte i come up with when im so dead tired im not worth knowing (kinda like right now even but oh wells...) ciao missy!
    | Posted on 2004-11-03 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      It's amazing how much this is true. Just the right amount of fatigue helps my thoughts get through without compulsive editing. Too much mind destroys feeling, to much feeling and the story becomes pathetically vague. I love "my ingenuity is a rapid train with no brakes" May your wheels always turn.
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    | Posted on 2004-11-03 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the message that you send. You say that instead of wasting your creativivity on forgotten dreams, you could be writing them down instead of sleeping. I also write late into the night and i write a lot better when i do so. I also like the power in it even though its a relatively simple poem. Good job, write on
    | Posted on 2004-11-03 00:00:00 | by Rob Orchard | [ Reply to This ]
      where is that perfect degree? i'd like to find it, too. i remember as a teenager, i'd stay up all night and get that "high" feeling you get from lack of sleep. this poem is food for thought, it is! my mom always tells me, "no one ever died from lack of sleep." i beg to differ... what if you fall asleep behind the wheel? anyway, you painted an interesting and thoughtful picture here.
    | Posted on 2004-11-02 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      It shows that you are dealing with a sickness that not only tears you apart physically, but mentally also. Good right. Very clear and the usage of imagry and metaphore is good.
    | Posted on 2004-11-02 00:00:00 | by poeticvisionary | [ Reply to This ]
      i thought that it was good. i liked the imagery that you used. it was clear. i know the frustration of insomnia and it shows in your words. i think that you should add some more punctuation. i thought that it was well written and sincere. i liked it keep it up.
    | Posted on 2004-11-02 00:00:00 | by maquiladora | [ Reply to This ]
      you sound rather frustrated just wanting to sleep and wake up feeling refreshed ...to wake up and actually feel alive...i'm feeling you my sleep pattern has royally sucked lately...i like the structure of this write it reads really well this way...smiles purps
    | Posted on 2004-11-02 00:00:00 | by purplesun24 | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem is very well written...it's not choppy, the flow is consistant...and the topic...is all too familar to me. I'd love to read more of your writing.
    | Posted on 2004-11-02 00:00:00 | by Juliets_dagger | [ Reply to This ]


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