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I dont really know


Author: Lachesis
ASL Info:    16,f,wi
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Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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I was just insired by younge love and how you always get hurt no matter what, your just to nieve. Always wait and take your time thereal one willstick around.
Dont listen to me I donr know what I am saying.
Dont laught at me please I am a dork. jk


I dont really know



Here I stand in the shower.
Crying for a half an hour.
His words running over in my head,
of what he had said.
He could have let me be,
instead of telling me.
I'm kind of glad he told.
So now I can behold.
Looking though the window tring not to cry.
Just wishing everything between us would die.
All the things we did together.
I thought it would last forever.
The first time we meet I had my heart set.
But then I broke your heart and now we have to be apart.




Submitted on 2004-11-02 16:33:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i'm usually not a fan of rhyming at all but i think you did a very nice job with it. it doesn't seem to forced. i think this poem is pretty good except for -
All the things we did together.
I thought it would last forever.
- because that sort of line is just so cliché and over used. nice job though <3
| Posted on 2005-01-19 00:00:00 | by Lemmy | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked this a lot! It had a good flow and rhyme..might need to fix meet to met, but other than that was a good poem.
| Posted on 2004-11-02 00:00:00 | by EnHakkore | [ Reply to This ]
  i thought that it was good. the rhyming was good and it read well. there was a typo in line 9(trying). i thought that there was some good imagery in it. and the emotion was well felt. i liked it. keep it up.
| Posted on 2004-11-02 00:00:00 | by maquiladora | [ Reply to This ]


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