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    dots Submission Name: Come with medots
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    Author: curiosityskitty
    ASL Info:    30/F/TN
    Elite Ratio:    3.2 - 145/149/30
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 364
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 438



    Description:
       This would really fall under affection, but since that is not a category yet...this is the next best.


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    dotsCome with medots
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    Come place your heart in my hands,
    I値l shelter your battered soul.
    Come rest your weary eyes,
    I値l fill the lifeless hole.

    Come and love with me,
    Your tears I値l wipe away.
    Put you above all others,
    Your trust I won稚 betray.

    Come let me console you,
    I値l hold you close to me.
    Come place your heart in my hands,
    Together we値l be free.




    Submitted on 2004-11-02 20:24:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Another great job of writing, I'm impressed by your excellant usage of the lines.
    Too bad people do not realize punctuation is suppossed to be there, 'FOR THR READER- DA'.
    Again I'll be reading more!
    | Posted on 2004-11-03 00:00:00 | by Clayton | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought this was very sweet as well...but one question...in the 2nd stanza did you mean to say..I'll put no other above you? I was kinda confused bout that...but other than that, 2 thumbs up
    | Posted on 2004-11-02 00:00:00 | by w0rdz_0f_wizd0m | [ Reply to This ]
      i thought that i was good. it was very heartfelt, i thought. the rhyming scheme was pretty good. i would add some punctuaiton to help it transition from line to line. i liked the imagery in it and the emotion was good. i liked it. keep it up.
    | Posted on 2004-11-02 00:00:00 | by maquiladora | [ Reply to This ]



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