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    dots Submission Name: Connectiondots
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    Author: BCute
    ASL Info:    23/F/MO
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 1295/1416/362
    Words: 205
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 319
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       This is to someone special. He knows who he is. I don't know if he'll like it or not. Here ya go STP, don't forget, I love you.


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    I sit here and ponder,
    unable to sleep again,
    late at night,
    the connection I made with him.
    How if I'd never been there,
    taken that first step,
    we would have never met,
    would have never clicked.
    I would have never been able to start to forget,
    the memories that were silently and softly killing me with regrets.

    Wonder if he feels the same way I feel about him.
    Slowly trying to let everything sink in.
    I try not to feel overwhelmed or doubt it's all true,
    yet there's just something too good about being with you.
    Something all too good to be true.
    Something I've not felt before,
    something scary, yet exciting and new.
    Just hope that whatever I do,
    I don't ever hurt you.
    I don't want to do what I tend to always do,
    get scared and make an excuse and just leave you.

    You gotta stop me,
    read the connection,
    know my mind like you already do,
    know I care about you.
    Don't let me play it off,
    don't let me act like I don't need you.
    I sit alone and ponder again,
    late at night,
    unable to sleep,
    the connection,
    that beautifully frightening connection,
    I made with you.




    Submitted on 2004-11-03 02:26:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      WOWOWOW... I really am just waiting for the day that I can give you some kind of negative feedback or find something wrong with one of your poems. Haha. Im not really waiting for that day. But either way I dont think it will ever come. There is nothing I would change about this at all. Just keep it up. I love reading all of your stuff.
    | Posted on 2004-11-04 00:00:00 | by FeelingAlive | [ Reply to This ]
      hey babe, of course im going to like it if its written by you especially to someone i know alot about... you almost made me cry you know when i read that because i coulda wrote that poem for you because i feel so much the same, i just i never hurt you because i know that the pain for you would be so much more then if you were to hurt me... thank you... just thanks alot i just pray that i dont screw up though i will try not to and dont be affraid to love me because i love you just the same you give what you get. love ya peace kevy
    | Posted on 2004-11-03 00:00:00 | by kjb | [ Reply to This ]
      Very good Cute One!

    It's really nice to see that someting new is a brewin'!

    Your poem says SO much, and in a very feeling way!

    TeddyD
    | Posted on 2004-11-03 00:00:00 | by TeddyD | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow! This is fantastic and really speaks millions.. It flows nicely even though it changes slightly in the last verse... It really struck a chord and I can relate all too well :)
    | Posted on 2004-11-03 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]


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