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    dots Submission Name: To the Mistdots
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    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Bytes: 617



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    dotsTo the Mistdots
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    Your face leaves ravines of tears,
    Dug deep enough to have been there for years.
    You look for some kind of assurance,
    Only trialing your own endurance.
    You fell into Lifes delusion,
    A midst your own confusion.
    Found a love that would not have you,
    A shallow, court-less, snake like fool.
    Now, you find yourself teetering on a pier,
    Seeking a great escape for the fear.
    You think you can't live alone,
    So, you throw yourself to the mercy of the foam.
    In my heart you'll always exist,
    Now, that I taste you in the mist




    Submitted on 2004-11-03 20:11:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      another great one. i am a big fan of your work and would love to see more in the near future. i like the line you fell into lifes delusion, a mist of your own confusion. very powerful.
    | Posted on 2004-11-03 00:00:00 | by TechnoticQ | [ Reply to This ]


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