Bored & Mischievious by DarkenedSoul

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Submission Name: Bored & Mischievious dots

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Author:	DarkenedSoul
ASL Info:	30/m/astral dreams
Elite Ratio:	4.29 - 77/60/17
Words:	132

Class/Type:	Poetry/Comedy
Total Views:	310
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	781

Description:
Just a little ranting to break up the monotony.

Bored & Mischievious dots

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I always thought that it would pass me by;
that tingling feeling felt deep inside.
I thought it was love but it was gas,
and I smiled real big when it escaped my ass.
I hear its a fire raging inside;
permanent heartburn! Are you out of your mind!?
I hear your pulse races and your heart beats fast
like having a stroke, I think I'll pass.
I hear you can't sleep, become an insomniac;
if thats the case, ask for a refund
and get your heart back.
Tell me now folks if love is so grand,
why all the sad songs about wedding bands?
I'll stick to the things I know are true;
a twelve pack of beer, a joint or two,
and a friend that says "this buds for you".

Submitted on 2004-11-04 13:50:31 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  It certainly brought a smile to my face...very creative little write.. well done.. it made a very nice change.. now i have to fill the word count lol
| Posted on 2004-11-16 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
  hey thanks for adding Death Hath Loved to your Favorites and commenting... I am flattered! On In Sweet Desecration, the second mention of 'doll' is simply reiterating the fact, and explaining how it feels more completely. That aside, this piece I suppose is more geared towards males, because I found it a little...em...crass? Heh just chalk it up to my female hormones. I like the middle of it!
hehehehe... have fun guy. :)
| Posted on 2004-11-05 00:00:00 | by MerryDeath | [ Reply to This ]
  great comedy laughing inside and out terrific way to set it upeverytime i fart i will think of this thought i read
thanx sandman
| Posted on 2004-11-04 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
  a real change from the somber mood in es... i was laughing out loud from beginning to end because i know the feeling i have acid refulx!
| Posted on 2004-11-04 00:00:00 | by turn back | [ Reply to This ]
  the only word i can think to describe this is "clever". i think it was very very clever. you take unexpected stanza turns that catch the reader by surprise. it was not what i expected right from the start. this is a rare gift, to be able to do that so well. i enjoyed it immensely.
-Q
| Posted on 2004-11-04 00:00:00 | by TechnoticQ | [ Reply to This ]
  that was good. i found it humorous. i thought that it was a good change from the other darker poems. it's good to laugh. keep it up.
| Posted on 2004-11-04 00:00:00 | by maquiladora | [ Reply to This ]
  Haha... great... thanks for the laugh. Love the part where you say "thought it was love but it was gas. Too funny. By the way... drugs are bad lol
| Posted on 2004-11-04 00:00:00 | by mmmb0p | [ Reply to This ]
  This wuz a great, needed change from all the depressing stuff I've been reading. Thanks very much for a step out of monotony. Ya made me laugh and I'm still smiling about it, great job cuz I wuzn't exactly in the best mood. Thanks for getting me outta my funk!
| Posted on 2004-11-04 00:00:00 | by WaxingPoetic | [ Reply to This ]
  ha ha ha this poem made my day. I love writing like this...stuff that you just can't help but smile at. I wouldn't change a thing about it. Much love.
| Posted on 2004-11-04 00:00:00 | by Juliets_dagger | [ Reply to This ]
  I thought it was love but it was gas,
and I smiled real big when it escaped my ass.

hehe i um liked your title...feel the same way...nice comparison. haha. it made me laugh.
| Posted on 2004-11-04 00:00:00 | by graffitijeans | [ Reply to This ]
  '...I never run out of ways to ridicule the human race that still finds that their gastrocolic expulsions are humorous.'
Alright... You did good to get a smirk outta me.
I suppose we can all throw away some class once in awhile - I'm sure there are people who could use it more than me...

I still can't decide if this was worth my time...
| Posted on 2004-11-04 00:00:00 | by Eggman | [ Reply to This ]

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