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key to your heart


Author: Scribbles1338
ASL Info:    18/Female/St. Louis
Elite Ratio:    4.44 - 169 /167 /37
Words: 182
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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I just picture her standing on the front porch of a house out in the country somewhere. She's starting to freeze but refuses to believe that he no longer loves her. It's a very sad story, I think...


key to your heart



Somehow feeling so sure
In the snow here I stand
Knocking on your locked door
With the key in my hand

But the door is locked tightly
To the past which remains
Only inside my heart
Filled with disdain

I am holding the key
Tight in my fist
Never forgetting those
Moments of bliss

I knew you so well
Through memories shared
I could open your heart
And prove that I cared

How could you let go
And leave me locked out
You’ve changed all the locks
Without hearing me shout

And I’m left here to cry
For I cannot come in
It’s getting too cold
As the evening grows dim

Clutching onto the past
I stand here and weep
Looking down at your key
That I had sworn to keep

But I still keep on knocking
Scared of being alone
I am getting so cold
Can’t believe that you’re gone

As I stand on your threshold
The wind cuts like a dart
Clutching the key
That once opened your heart





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  i thought that it was good. very heartfelt. i thought that it was a very meloncholy peice. the rhyming was good and i liked the descriptivness of it. it painted a sad yet beautiful picture. i thought that it was weel done. keep it up.
| Posted on 2004-11-04 00:00:00 | by maquiladora | [ Reply to This ]
  This had a lot of emotion and you could definately feel that, it felt raw. I feel as if I am the girl left standing there .. feeling empty .. with nothing. So if that was what you wanted to create it worked so well. Great work, keep it up.
| Posted on 2004-11-04 00:00:00 | by Star_searcher | [ Reply to This ]
  I like the way you allow your emotion to flow through this poem. The rhyme was on the edge briefly. A very romantic scene is viewed in this one. I liked it.
| Posted on 2004-11-04 00:00:00 | by Njud_Gold | [ Reply to This ]
  wow. i loved the scheme and meter. i felt as if i was standing beside, with a cool wintry wind blowing through my hair. i felt quite anxious.
As I stand on your threshold
The wind cuts like a dart
Clutching the key
That once opened your heart

i thought this line was about as perfect as a rhyme could get. very nice post.
-Q
| Posted on 2004-11-04 00:00:00 | by TechnoticQ | [ Reply to This ]
  Although you lost the rhyme scheme in the fourth and sixth stanzas this was overall a great poem. It was a pleasure to read. Much love.
| Posted on 2004-11-04 00:00:00 | by Juliets_dagger | [ Reply to This ]


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