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    dots Submission Name: Tamara Tambourinedots

    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       This is a song to a woman that i just met this fall.
    She was great, but understood me little. She loved the attention i gave her but loved little about me. She inspired me alot even though i knew she wouldn't let me close. So, to her i wrote this farewell.

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    dotsTamara Tambourinedots

    There is a hidden song
    That grabs your ears
    Beating on the drum.
    It's the sweet melody
    Tamara Tambourine.

    It will sweep your soul
    Causing joy
    With ever rising note.
    It's the wondrous voice
    Tamara Tambourine.

    Mozart couldn't capture
    This grand sound.
    He couldn't dream
    Of such a ring
    As of this,
    Tamara Tambourine.

    No one has ever seen
    But only heard
    The lovely strum
    On their hearts
    Of the demi-nymph
    That is,
    Tamara Tambourine.

    In my dreams
    Her hips walk with chime
    Of lovely parables
    That touch my very soul
    Thus, I do sing
    To my,
    Tamara Tambourine.

    Submitted on 2004-11-04 15:56:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i thought that it was good. very deep and heartfelt. i liked the repition of the words Tamara Tambourine. it added a good feeling to the piece. i thought that it was well written and was a pleasure to read. i liked it. keep it up.
    | Posted on 2004-11-04 00:00:00 | by maquiladora | [ Reply to This ]
      great post soulraven. i loved the way you tie the name in, very skillful of course. i love your use of simile- demi- nymph i especially liked. was she unbelievable? dont you just know she was. great post.
    | Posted on 2004-11-04 00:00:00 | by TechnoticQ | [ Reply to This ]

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