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    dots Submission Name: Cinquain: A Marooned Dreamdots
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    Author: Tears of Azrael
    ASL Info:    14/F/Lost
    Elite Ratio:    5.47 - 107/102/25
    Words: 26
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 933
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    Bytes: 191



    Description:
       OK, people have been asking me why this poem is called A MAROONED Dream if humans don't want to abandon this dream but actually live it, so people think it's really naive of me to title this poem this. Here is why: humans will never have peace because they're constantly going in wars and their biased judgment and actions blind them from the good things around them. Thus, a dream such as this one is as good as marooned.


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    dotsCinquain: A Marooned Dreamdots
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    A perfect world
    Purest light falling from Heaven
    Bathing in the calmest waters--delicate repose--
    A haven from the sordid reality consuming us all
    A marooned dream




    Submitted on 2004-11-04 18:24:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Well this poem is very short but very sweet. I'm loving it. The concept is good. i really would like to try writing a cinquain sometime. Much much love to ya my dear.
    | Posted on 2004-11-04 00:00:00 | by Juliets_dagger | [ Reply to This ]


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