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Good bye

Author: Akai_Ame
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i just wanted to say something to a friend of mine...he is always there when i need him. :D

Good bye

Thinking over what he said,
Maybe it's true
But that's what i dread,
So i'm saying good-bye to you.

The hell-hole? I won't go back there!
And i know just what to do.
I don't think he'd care,
So i'm only saying good-bye to you.

They know how THEY treated me,
Yet they don't care.
On a plane is where i'll be,
Flying through the air.

This is my last time,
I'll see the light of day.
So I must say to what's mine.
All i ask is remember me, okay?

My life is sad
That i will not miss, nor should i care.
But i'm oh so glad
That you were always there.

Submitted on 2004-11-04 18:51:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I don't know why you dislike this so. I think it is rather good. I can't say that it is something that gives you a warm feeling when you read it, but it certainly does bring certain emotions to the surface. It was powerful when you felt the emotion that was sewn into the words. I still think it was a good write, though you may disagree. -Kenji
| Posted on 2004-11-06 00:00:00 | by Kenji Light | [ Reply to This ]
  So i'm sayign good-bye to you.

There is a slight misspelling in this sentance, If you are anything like me, your fingers just lost their way. LOl, I do that quite often. I really liked this though.
| Posted on 2004-11-04 00:00:00 | by curiosityskitty | [ Reply to This ]
  break up are always sad but if they misstreat you it maybe for the better live life to fullest
and be happy
I love your poem
| Posted on 2004-11-04 00:00:00 | by littlepoet | [ Reply to This ]

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