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    dots Submission Name: Hell on Earthdots
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    Author: metalman_21
    ASL Info:    17/m/NE
    Elite Ratio:    2.58 - 30/42/17
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 785
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       I fell asleep in English class one day, and had the most fucked up dream I think i've ever had. I think this describes it pretty well.


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    dotsHell on Earthdots
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    The sky roars open,
    Raining fallen angels,
    Wings torn, halos broken.
    The shards form a pentagram,
    Satanic in sorts.

    The earth bleeds red,
    As the shape encircles humanity,
    Gripping out last breath,
    As we reach for sanity,
    But it is nowhere to be found.

    Madness spreads like wildfire,
    In the dry grasses of the hills,
    Once in our minds as a place of good,
    Now burns in hellfire.

    As I lift my head,
    I realize that I’m in a desk,
    With a notebook,
    A pen,
    And a pentagram…




    Submitted on 2004-11-04 23:54:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I know too much about such things to give you
    a real comment or share my true thoughts,
    but I will say I rather enjoyed this write.Its quite different from the others I have read.
    | Posted on 2004-11-08 00:00:00 | by DarkenedSoul | [ Reply to This ]
      wow i loved it i'm really surprised too because i usually tend to steer clear of dream poems. but this was definitely quite different. had it's own idea as well as your own style. good job. keep on truckin.
    | Posted on 2004-11-04 00:00:00 | by kair | [ Reply to This ]


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