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    dots Submission Name: Uncouth Lovedots
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    Author: _proper_noun_
    ASL Info:    20/m/OK
    Elite Ratio:    5.36 - 106/88/24
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 1877
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 856



    Description:
       It's about sex. What else should a 16-year-old guy write about?


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    dotsUncouth Lovedots
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    Strangulation,
    Defacation,
    Death to tyrannical masturbation.

    Gratification,
    Mutilation,
    Whatever happened to procrastination?

    What you wanted from everyone,
    You couldn't get from any of them.
    Dressed in linens that cling with sweat,
    You gave yourself away.

    Sweet rank breaths of wordy love,
    Drinking them with eager abandon,
    Leaving yourself with none but no one.
    You are alone now.

    Fornication,
    Transformation,
    Metamorphosis from a revelation.

    Coagulation,
    Provocation,
    Confusion finds its sanctification.

    What you wanted from everyone,
    You couldn't get from any of them.
    Dressed in linens that cling with sweat,
    You gave yourself away.




    Submitted on 2004-11-05 01:57:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      wow who would of thought such a great poem could be writen that featured the line "Death to tyrannical masturbation.". that line made me laugh and expect some silly little poem but i was shocked to find a realy good thought provoking peom. i thought this was great and i think it going in the favorites. but come on dude your making the rest of us 16 year olds look bad. at least put a few typos in the next one. nobody likes a show off.
    | Posted on 2004-11-14 00:00:00 | by nameless_nobody | [ Reply to This ]
      okay, it's really scary to see something this good from a 16 y.o., wet behind the ears kid. all i can say is 'wow'! this is something i'm putting in my favs.
    | Posted on 2004-11-05 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]


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