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    dots Submission Name: Is the Doctor In?dots
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    Author: Clayton
    ASL Info:    55/Country Boy/Somewhere
    Elite Ratio:    5.02 - 880/809/193
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
    Total Views: 289
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 967



    Description:
       This is for Medusa who thinks i cannot write a prose/poem with out rhyming. so this is my best effort. Medusa, I hope you are watching!


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    dotsIs the Doctor In?dots
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    The sound of gentle tapping
    as the words flow,
    A message from my conscience speaks
    to me
    Scrambled in sleep
    then forced from the depths
    An earthquake of thoughts
    rush onto the page.
    Trying to delete them
    but its message overcomes
    My hands are but messengers filled with light
    Suddenly smoke arose
    as keys began to freeze
    The screen filled a murky gray
    as silence fell.
    Humming from the printer calling out my name
    As flashing lights and bells
    call out in great pain
    Searching franticly in the drawer
    for its sacrifice
    Moaning from within
    as it rejects my homage.
    Falling to my knees and gently
    twisting a wire,
    Looking for the switch
    to power up the tower
    Praising it for never failing me in the past.
    Alas, it done its over,
    the memory is brain dead.




    Submitted on 2004-11-05 08:10:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      devine. make me feel special giving me an alert a new one is in. i guess you're a natural rhymer cause a few of your lines are still but this was exceptional. worth reading more than once. and the flow was great too, just thought i should mention that.
    | Posted on 2004-11-05 00:00:00 | by medusa | [ Reply to This ]
      this is great. i liked this a lot. you can write without rhymes just fine, although i my self am personally bias to rhymes, and i liked your earlier rhyming stuff a lot. still though, this is a great post. i love the way you use the computer as an axial point. very nice. also, i can tell this could easily be a rhyming poem, and you show through with rhyme type form, even though your words did not rhyme.
    -Q
    | Posted on 2004-11-05 00:00:00 | by TechnoticQ | [ Reply to This ]



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