failed goals don't laugh
just sit there unreached
only a quivering finger out of reach
taunting you in their silence
forcing your soul down
never should a man lie down
and let his dreams die
for the woman of his dreams
or the children of his future
your last breath should be yours
spent on just rewards
for the lady in red
or the child in your lap
make those dreams come true
giving that child a hero to look up to
something that child will remember
a story for them to tell
a leading man for your girl to wed
no matter how easy it would be
DO NOT GIVE UP ON YOUR DREAMS
ok, i just typed out this real long comment on this poem and i lost it. i just wanted to say that this poem brought out some repressed feelings about dreams. this is an inspiring write. i like this a lot. it needs a bit of work in the middle though. keep it coming
I think the subtle rhyme scheme and choppy flow worked in your favor in such a write with original wording and imagery... excellent first line... keep it up
Submission Name: priorities
i just wanted to say that this poem brought out some repressed feelings about dreams. this is an inspiring write. i like this a lot. it needs a bit of work in the middle though. keep it coming 