Description: This refers to a "someone" several times, meant to, in a sense, replace a name or something of the like. If you don't think it works, tell me.
This is a common state of mind of mine, it may be redundant emotional venting.
I wonder how old this actually is. Seems to me it's quite timeless though, throughout many times in ones life. Very articulate and profound, I enjoyed it and sighed over it as I'm still living in the shadow of an origin not unlike what you describe here. As someone stated earlier, it's very easy to see that you are torn, and you continue to sway between power and helplessness. I think you should do a follow up to this piece actually, I think you give a lot of credit to others and not enough to yourself. But your confidence at the end is very reasurring in us all, I believe. I hope to see future pieces from you in ways I still can't fathom.
I thought it was wonderful. I personaly think the use of "Someone." works very well. It's a great way to fit through struggles. Think that they are just there to make you stronger, know you cannot break, you can only build yourself up through the hardships. I really loved this poem and it made me feel good. That sounds a little weird.
But win or lose, I know now I'm not in pieces, I'm not unfixable. Struggle is nature's way of making us strong enough to survive. I liked thisstanza. it mademe think of healing, overcoming obstaces, coming to the realiztion that we are not broken even though at times it may ssem so. Life puts us through hardships in order to test us, give us strength. Welearn , we heal, and move on
i loved this and cant wait to see more from you. the descriptive was very powerful, which is good as it speaks of power. the torn anguish inherent and underlying speaks of a feeling of being caged, or at least that is how i interpret it. i liked this poem a lot, again, and welcome to elite skills- you make a fine adition. -Q