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    dots Submission Name: I think that I'm.......dots
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    Author: camoflage
    ASL Info:    16/f/nc
    Elite Ratio:    4.51 - 459/295/71
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 1038
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1067



    Description:
       um, I know it sounds corny, but what do you think?
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    dotsI think that I'm.......dots
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    I'm rich, but I'm poor but I'm strong but I'm weak
    cuz I'm in love with you
    everything askew
    I can't stop thinkin' of
    the boy I've been dreamin' of
    I think I'm in love
    Yeah, I think i'm in love.
    Your face searches mine
    for something you will not find
    and that's a lack of hope
    you helped me live, you helped me cope
    Your eyes shine
    as they look into mine
    Your hair shimmers in the sun
    I hope you know that our journey has just begun.
    I can't stop thinkin' of
    the boy I've been dreamin' of
    I think I'm love love.
    It's crazy
    but baby
    I think i'm in love with you
    And i think that it's true
    I think that its true
    that I'm in love with you.
    I think
    I think
    I think
    That I'm in love
    in love
    in love
    I thiink that I'm in love with you.




    Submitted on 2004-11-05 21:08:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I think the word corny is the wrong word to use because a lot of songs have these kind of words in anyway. I agree that it does need some work to sort out verses and choruses etc. but I enjoyed what you had on show here. People do feel like this at least once in their lives so its nothing to be ashamed of. Have a nice day.
    | Posted on 2004-11-06 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this wiill make a good song. it needs some remodeling. lol I mean it needs to be worked on. I'll give you a little help, the first line
    soulds better if it was
    I'm rich and I'm poor,
    I'm weak and I'm strong

    there are other changes that are needed, but I'll let you do it, so that you can learn, but never, never give up.
    | Posted on 2004-11-05 00:00:00 | by hotrodruss | [ Reply to This ]
      At first, I was like. THIS should be a SONG. and then I realized you classified it under lyrics. haha.
    Well.
    I think its SO LOVELY! just like KC said, everyone has been there, everyone has done that so they can all relate!
    Good work
    -Andrya
    | Posted on 2004-11-05 00:00:00 | by andrya | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought it was really good... corny- a tad... but who cares.. love= corniness... love is awesome and you shouldn't care if you're corny or not... keep it up.. even if you think it's corny!
    | Posted on 2004-11-05 00:00:00 | by xSweetestThingx | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the i think parts
    I do things like that 2
    I like
    I think i'm in love with you
    And i think that it's true
    I think that its true
    that I'm in love with you.
    keep it up peace!
    | Posted on 2004-11-05 00:00:00 | by Cordell | [ Reply to This ]
      Lol, these lyrics would certainly make a great song! Despite the fact that you might find or think that what you wrote is corny, I don't think it is THAT corny. I mean, everyone feels that way when they're really in love with someone.
    | Posted on 2004-11-05 00:00:00 | by zhi wei | [ Reply to This ]
      i thought that was really good, even though you may think it's corny, lots of people feel the same way about some one at least once in their lives.
    | Posted on 2004-11-05 00:00:00 | by kc | [ Reply to This ]


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