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    dots Submission Name: Scar for a Bonedots

    Author: Jester_Gesture
    ASL Info:    23/f
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 365/459/201
    Words: 136
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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       This poem has nothing to do with sex, just to clarify. That is all I'll tell you.

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    dotsScar for a Bonedots

    He turns you on your side
    And twists your limbs.
    One to left and that to the right.
    And he breaks you in half.
    Itís a simple process in the end.
    You are burning with embarrasment
    Because he was distracted this time.
    You didnít really want him to touch you.
    And you let him anyways.
    You turned on your side
    Let your arms hang limp for a moment
    Until he adjusted
    Every aspect of your body.
    And you looked up at his scarred face.
    His whispy hair parted on one side
    Gentle gray eyes that tell you,
    Your bones belong to him.
    You stare at his marred skin
    Where a long scar traces just under his cheek.
    So ugly and despairing to a soft voice.
    He shares his vulnerabilities
    And demands yours.

    Submitted on 2004-11-06 18:11:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hey- thatís a powerful piece you have there. Very creepy tone. Leaves you feeling kind of murky. Nice. Very nice indeed. ~#6-
    | Posted on 2004-11-16 00:00:00 | by Six_Grey | [ Reply to This ]
      this poem said a lot to me. it was in fact very intense and enchanting, you do well with descriptions of strange circumstances. "gentle gray eyes that tell you/ your bones belong to him"... definately my favorite line. i love the styling of this piece, it is blatantly well written.
    encore, my dear, encore. im wondering who the HIM in this poem is... maybe an apparrition for all i know, none the less it makes it better than you are left to decide for yourself. thats when you know you have good poetry, when you can make it seem the way you want it to!
    | Posted on 2004-11-12 00:00:00 | by Grey Eyes | [ Reply to This ]
      It seems like a chiropractic visit!

    It really feels powerful, even so!

    I agree that the last line is both creepy and moving.
    | Posted on 2004-11-07 00:00:00 | by Amelit | [ Reply to This ]
      oh maybe hurting her makes him feel better about herself...right??? well thats another guess ok??? so let me if i am close or way off

    | Posted on 2004-11-06 00:00:00 | by Rhaine | [ Reply to This ]
      i kinda dont understand this that well...but here is my interpretation: you said its not sex so this must be like a symbolic thing, right? so yea this guy has all these insecurities and these scars...so he wants to have the girls like...i dont know what you would call it..i guess securities??? and her skin? because his is all nasty and ugo...he takes her and looks over her perfect body and it might makes him feel better to pretend he had skin like that...i dont get it as you might see and how do the bones fit in???

    | Posted on 2004-11-06 00:00:00 | by Rhaine | [ Reply to This ]

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