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    dots Submission Name: Obituary: George W. Bushdots
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    Author: morte
    ASL Info:    17/female/earth
    Elite Ratio:    4.7 - 430/348/55
    Words: 61
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       For my Spanish class we had to write a calavery (a fake obituary for a public figure) for Day of the Dead...this is mine...it needs a lot of work on the format, the rhyme scheme, and etc....but i just wanted to see what everyone thought of it so far


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    dotsObituary: George W. Bushdots
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    Today George W. Bush died
    And not a single person cried
    Tomorrow he goes in the ground
    In his new big wooden box
    To be president of the dead
    He'll promise them peace, but instead
    He'll declare war in justice's name
    On some far off cemetary
    After four years, between me and you
    They'll be smart and elect someone new




    Submitted on 2004-11-06 19:39:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Three letter...LOL...this was great, and I also find it funny on the amounts of posts any political poems or anything gets...I liked this one, I hate Bush...And I don't care what anyone says or thinks...Good Job
    | Posted on 2005-07-30 00:00:00 | by t0_eazy | [ Reply to This ]
      well, I feel the emotion. But I am sort of angry. See what someone's ignorance leads too. Well, he declared war, but in order for the war to have been declared i would have to be passed by over 77% of Congress. So, maybe we should blame the hundreds of people there who agreed with him. Maybe it was of ill-will, but our representatives are to be equally blames, as our government does strive for checks and balances, which trust me, seperates us frombeing a 3rd world country
    | Posted on 2005-07-12 00:00:00 | by Lauren Guzman | [ Reply to This ]
      ALEX, as much as i hate politics and the government, this was straight up funny! hahaha...i love it. i like the part where it suggests declaring war on a far off cemetary, great work.
    | Posted on 2005-03-31 00:00:00 | by Podenco del infierno | [ Reply to This ]
      LOL, I love it. I like how it dogs him because some people deserve it. We should fly him to the middle of the warzone in Iraq and see how long he lasts. I just can't see how he got reelected. Maybe people like war and economic decline. This is great. I think it's fine because I can't see this being any more ironic.
    | Posted on 2004-11-06 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
      i do see who you voted for and it isnt the dead guy. I have to say i voted bush but in va i didnt matter but they both had there good parts and bad kerry flip floped lot where bush did promise peace but gave us body bags full of stiff that they put as nameless but were a soldier that died over purpose less cause good job i loved it
    sean
    | Posted on 2004-11-06 00:00:00 | by Sean | [ Reply to This ]
      Ok to be honest I dont like kerry or bush. I dont like anyone in politics. I dont care about politics. I am gonna comment on the actual write instead of what other people are doing and bashing you for your beliefs which I strongly disagree with. It was very well written. And some good imagery I could see george bush as the president of the dead and the dead having a war. Which is kind of cool because people say when you die you are finally at peace and that is the total opposite people at peace having a war. Well I liked it. keep it up.
    | Posted on 2004-11-06 00:00:00 | by FeelingAlive | [ Reply to This ]
      i majorly aggree with hybridsongwrite. this was really disrespectful! how dare you! you don't know anything about bush except what you hear from your parents. i doubt you did any research on his accomplishments. so you think bush is so bad then what do you think of kerry? the man who would have made abortions legal. the guy is a major hypocrite. overall this poem has no point and it is badly written. and i'm not saying that just becasue you wrote bad things about bush.
    | Posted on 2004-11-06 00:00:00 | by darkness child | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought this was the most disrespectful piece of work i have read in a long time. How dare you, from any culture or belief, write a poem about the subject of a false death of the president of the united states. You should be ashamed. Besides, it's not like kerry or clinton( or any other loud-mouthed democrat for that matter) are any better. But wether you like george bush, or you don't, it's still massively disrespectful. I don't go writing crap like this about kerry and his life, do i?
    | Posted on 2004-11-06 00:00:00 | by hybridsongwrite | [ Reply to This ]
      amen amen amen ...boy what a piece - u are right there are things u could work on - but the focal point of this is one that is alright by me...i wish u luck on the finished product..
    | Posted on 2004-11-06 00:00:00 | by nicegurlintx | [ Reply to This ]
      Cool. I like Bush, but I see where you're comin' from. That is quite an interesting assignment. I wish we did that too, I would do one for Kerri.
    | Posted on 2004-11-06 00:00:00 | by Suven7 | [ Reply to This ]
      Its a really good idea, and i dont think you should just let it go to waste, even if its just a school assginment. Your words about bush are way exhausted, and way to common to be taken seiorusly. Somebody sees this title and wants to hear something new, and your deep thoughts and such, but you left it so topical. I think you should try to revise it... and elloborate too. never let your stuff be ordinary
    | Posted on 2004-11-06 00:00:00 | by Josh | [ Reply to This ]
      there is one thing we Americans need to remember, that is we have the power over the president. most people are scared to stand up for what they belive if it involves the Government. I am not afraid, but I am just one person against a whole system. if I had to go it alone I would although I doubt it would not make much of an impact cuz of my minority status.
    | Posted on 2004-11-06 00:00:00 | by hotrodruss | [ Reply to This ]
      Funny, but watch yourself, you never know when some die-hard bush fan will come along and blow your brains out because of this. ;)
    | Posted on 2004-11-06 00:00:00 | by Siren Mengana | [ Reply to This ]
      i quite enjoyed this obituary. for multiple reasons. the only thing that came up as odd in my head as i read this was that america HAS to pick a new president in four years because W. has already been president...that just sort of threw me off. my favorite part was the "on some far off cemetry"...it really sticks with the images of the poem. and i don't think the lack of rhyming in the third and fourth lines draws too much away from it-if you find something better, go for it, but it's fine the way it is.
    | Posted on 2004-11-06 00:00:00 | by osweetrepose | [ Reply to This ]
      I take it you're a Democrat. Don't get me wrong I agree with you completely. I think the message rings out loud and clear. I really liked this piece. There is no good reason that our troops should be out there getting killed. I was in Afghanistan, and I believe we needed to be there, but there is no reason to be in Iraq. He was my commander in chief and I still don't like him. I don't know, you just hit a nerve with this piece. That's a good thing. Good work, Keep them coming. etc. etc.
    -Light
    | Posted on 2004-11-06 00:00:00 | by Lightbringer | [ Reply to This ]


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