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    dots Submission Name: Hues of Fall PT. 2dots

    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 33
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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       Just enjoying a wonderful, beautiful look around Placerville, CA in the fall. Awash with color.
    Love, Peace, Joy!!!!

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    dotsHues of Fall PT. 2dots

    I am liquid amber
    burning red
    I am misty mountain
    cloudy bed
    I am moist earth
    spawining green
    I am playful breeze
    not seen
    I am Life
    I am Season

    Submitted on 2004-11-07 13:05:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hmmm..short and sweet are many of your poems...just like the author. "Liquid amber" makes me think of blood..."Burning red" makes me think of someone who is angry. Maybe you were angry at someone when you wrote this or maybe the leaf you saw pissed you off...HA! I liked it.
    | Posted on 2004-11-08 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it...its not really me cuz i normally write about like more personal and not only like rhymes those are not my types of poems...dont get me wrongi like it ..its just Not my style!
    | Posted on 2004-11-08 00:00:00 | by anita_89 | [ Reply to This ]
      I read the 1st one, and now I read the 2nd one. And I love them both. But I think I like this one a bit better, it brought the ideas together better.
    Good work!
    | Posted on 2004-11-07 00:00:00 | by andrya | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this should have been a little longer. And add more colors and description. I personally think this is a good format and start. I love fall so I just had to read this, but you did leave me hanging a little. :)
    | Posted on 2004-11-07 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]
      I personally liked it. Ive always wanted to see a REAL fall. One with beautiful colors. I live somewhere where the seasons are winter, winter, summer, winter. We kinda skip the spring and fall. The leaves turn awfully quick, and they are normally just yellow. Its pretty for all of 2 days. AND THEN it snows.
    Good work
    | Posted on 2004-11-07 00:00:00 | by andrya | [ Reply to This ]
      I'll have to agree with Storm of Bliss on this one...the concept is very nice indeed...but it just didn't do much for me...much love.
    | Posted on 2004-11-07 00:00:00 | by Juliets_dagger | [ Reply to This ]
      This may be one of those poems where you just have to be there, sorry I couldn't relay it poetically.
    I appreciate the comment & time. Love, Peace, Joy!!!
    | Posted on 2004-11-07 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it too. I've always thought of autumn colors as being alternately fluid and misty. I don't even mind the rhyme. I like "I am misty mountain/cloudy bed" best in this piece.
    | Posted on 2004-11-07 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]

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