This site will self destruct in 2 months, March 17.
It will come back, and be familiar and at the same time completely different.
All content will be deleted. Backup anything important.
--- Staff
Roleplay Cloud -

Sign up to EliteSkills

Already have an account? Login to Roleplay.Cloud
Forgot password? Recover Password

ps, you destroyed me

Author: bite my lip
ASL Info:    20/f/nc
Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 59 /79 /12
Words: 123
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
Total Views: 1794
Average Vote:    4.0000
Bytes: 789


ps, you destroyed me

dear your name here,
it's been ages
where have you been?
everyday i awake
and gaze at the beautiful gashes in my skin.

the sun burns my eyes
so i close them
in hopes for a better day to come.
relinquish your power over me
i beg of you.
i just want to go home.

i swear i'll run away and never look back
if that's all you ask.
i will not stop
untill my knees hit the leaves
and i am torn away from breath.

i'll cast my tears off.
they are stupid and naive.
i'll apologize a thousand times
and take all of the blame.
resounding in my head:
your name. your name. your name.

Submitted on 2004-11-07 21:03:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
Edit post

Rate This Submission

1: >_<
2: I dunno...
3: meh!
4: Pretty cool
5: Wow!


  I feel an abusive relationship and the love you have for the abuser anyway. You dont deserve it and you are worth more than the way you are treated. Stand up and conquer girl!
| Posted on 2004-11-21 00:00:00 | by elephantasia | [ Reply to This ]
  Powerful and unnabashed. I felt the pain of the lost lover, the feelings of abandonment and betrayal. I too have felt these things and this poem cut my side. Thank's for sharing
| Posted on 2004-11-19 00:00:00 | by cainboy | [ Reply to This ]
  titled ps. you destroy me and written as a letter to lover. "dear your name here" very nice with the title. and now i understand the nickname you use on a certain website;)
| Posted on 2004-11-15 00:00:00 | by Butterfly Bullets | [ Reply to This ]
  I felt the first and last verses worked the best at conveying the hateful, lonely longing… Overall, a great poem. Keep up the pleasant work- ~#6-
| Posted on 2004-11-09 00:00:00 | by Six_Grey | [ Reply to This ]
  Yeah, sounds like you need to let go of this person. Good writing about how people can be so cruel to someone else...and seems to relish in that cruelty. Very sad but very true for some.
| Posted on 2004-11-07 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
  WOW! I love that poem I'm defentally adding it to my favorite list! its...WOW! You have A LOT! OF TALENT! WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW, I DON'T KNOW HOW MANY TIMES I CAN SAY IT!

| Posted on 2004-11-07 00:00:00 | by Monkey | [ Reply to This ]
  all of this poem is great but my favorite line is the sun burns my eyes is my favorite...dont know why but it really caught my eye...this is a great poem about holding and not being able to let go...i really love this poem its great and applies to me a lot...adding to my favs

| Posted on 2004-11-07 00:00:00 | by Rhaine | [ Reply to This ]
  i really really like this. i know this is a bad comment, but i can have someone that may have meant the world to u at one point, just turn their back, and become a totally different person-but even as many times as u say u hate them or want to forget about them, u cant...i dunno if thats exactly what u were feeling when writing this, but thats what i got from it...i also loved how u ended it with "your name. your name. your name"
nice write
| Posted on 2004-11-07 00:00:00 | by brokenmirror | [ Reply to This ]
  miss bling...
I loved it! you hid nothing.
true to nature you can sing.
keep up the rise.
Almost like you except failure and yet you
incircle pain.
| Posted on 2004-11-07 00:00:00 | by T.Redd | [ Reply to This ]
  Heartache, is that you? Sounds as if you left words unsaid. It is okay, we wont mind reading a little more of what it is thats plaguing you. Perhaps a full understanding will be the result. Spontaneous, yet not too distant from a semi-complexed love story, you just have to know where to look. Its been quite sometime since I have taken a deep interest in poetry. You have rekindled my love for writing, thank you. A poem in letter form that can apply to more than one person when you enter a name. Amazingly simple and at the same time sparkingly brilliant. I do believe you could be my muse. Just looking at your picture could help me write a love sonnet to warm even the coldest of hearts. Be a dear and keep in touch, will you?

ps- It could be the insominia talking, but I do believe in serenity through great literature, so somehow you could bring me peace... which is exactly what I need.
| Posted on 2004-11-07 00:00:00 | by JR Hoodlum | [ Reply to This ]

Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

1. Be honest.
2. Try not to give only compliments.
3. How did it make you feel?
4. Why did it make you feel that way?
5. Which parts?
6. What distracted from the piece?
7. What was unclear?
8. What does it remind you of?
9. How could it be improved?
10. What would you have done differently?
11. What was your interpretation of it?
12. Does it feel original?