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    dots Submission Name: Bloodlustdots
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    Author: drk_angl_17
    ASL Info:    23/f/TN
    Elite Ratio:    3.82 - 659/696/84
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       Ask ye no question which requires a truthful answer and ye shall recieve no lie...

    Almost made it into my *soul* series...but fell short of the vision I once had for it...

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    If thy mind be closed,
    reader take heed.
    If thy heart unwilling,
    no further should'dt thou read.

    For those who choose to stay,
    this tale be of blood
    of yearnings kept at bay
    of bloody satisfaction.

    For I swear it be true
    on certain a night
    my senses be raging
    crimson be my sight.

    Awoken from a state of dreams,
    plagued by and unsatiable need
    or so it always seems.
    Haunted by its taste.

    Envisioning it all around
    its vivid crimson color.
    All physical needs
    it seems to smother.

    It doth drive me mad.
    Such unrelenting consumation
    'til blood at last be had.
    Only then is it subdued.

    I jest with ye not.
    Though this be vague
    'tis a past experience
    of blood and its plague.




    Submitted on 2004-11-07 21:47:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I disagree with the common thought of you sounding like a pirate. From my point of view you are telling the story of first lust, using old english, such as you would hear from a vampire if you were to ever meet one. I am fond of this, and as of right now it is the only poem on my favorites list.
    | Posted on 2006-01-23 00:00:00 | by ThisIsReal | [ Reply to This ]
      Sounded like a Pirate that was inlove with blood, lol. I used to cut myself, just to see the crimson colour, and to smell its sweet scent, and to taste that sweet taste...Ok I am sorry I was dreaming about it...see now I love it...My AIM SNs have to do with blood, and so does my Yahoo, and MSN. Lol I really love it. but you already knew that Nice Pirate talk though...I would have thought that you were one, if I already didnt think that your werent one. If that makes sence...aww nice talkin to yah bout yer blood...


    Jesse
    | Posted on 2005-02-27 00:00:00 | by Kera | [ Reply to This ]
      [censored]in. the whole pirate efect is weird but funny. and if used in the right voice scary. i liked the title but i wanted killing. there was some but i dont believe killing one person can fullfill blodlust. i liked it nonetheless.
    | Posted on 2005-01-02 00:00:00 | by Di Re Rakord | [ Reply to This ]
      quite vampiric.. blood is rather intoxicating in it's own way.. though in this case, it was like looking straight through the eyes of one plauged by it.. i was almost expecting to hear of the taste being pacified.. somewhat dissappointing, though i admit it was interesting..
    Adam
    | Posted on 2004-11-18 00:00:00 | by Pyrosis | [ Reply to This ]
      this one seems like its supposed to be told like an old story teller like a legend thats pretty cool beans...wow..your poems are so...weird and...their just cool beans i guess! keep up the good work

    r~
    | Posted on 2004-11-11 00:00:00 | by Rhaine | [ Reply to This ]
      hmmm...well what inspired this? sounds like a pirate wrote this...you've been watching p of the c huh?! well whatever tickles your pickle i guess. and why arent you in school?! im really getting tired of this. havent you already seen that those damn doctors arent going to do anything for you?!
    | Posted on 2004-11-08 00:00:00 | by sweet-fire | [ Reply to This ]
      That is incredible, simply said. I fancy your use of archaic words or is more old English rather? It's not an easy task considering what epoch we live in. I could sense the obviousness of craving the narrator had for blood; it's so strong, and vivid. mmm also made me thirsty for tomato juice rofl, just kidding. Wonderful write. Take care.
    | Posted on 2004-11-07 00:00:00 | by wordsofmind | [ Reply to This ]


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