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    dots Submission Name: World of Butterfliesdots
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    Author: winged_writer_robyn
    ASL Info:    16/f/wa
    Elite Ratio:    3.36 - 116/162/44
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 883
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    Description:
       I wrote this for that feeling we get when we kiss someone, you know, the butterflies. oh, those butterflies are caused by the adreniline gland near our apendix or liver or something like that. yeah. so enjoy.


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    dotsWorld of Butterfliesdots
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    Fluttering
    Deeper and deeper they go
    Stronger and stronger they grow
    They stretch their wings
    They make it seem
    Like Iím flying
    Into your arms.

    You wrap around me
    Trapping them inside
    You kiss me deeply
    Allowing more to fly
    Into my lungs
    I just canít get enough
    Of this butterfly world
    You have taken me to.

    I want to soar
    With the grace of the thousands of wings
    Fluttering inside of me.
    To that butterfly world:
    You take me.




    Submitted on 2004-11-07 22:06:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This poem was absoultly amazing. your brilliant to think of comparing a kiss to a butterfly. i think you could have made this longer. but who knows? short and sweet can be better! i am definetly looking forward to reading more of your work
    xoxoxomuchlove-ash
    | Posted on 2005-04-02 00:00:00 | by DanceADream | [ Reply to This ]
      I have this beautiful image in my mind that you have created through this poem. It's lovely. I really enjoyed how you used these butterflies as a way to express how you feel. Good Job.
    | Posted on 2004-11-08 00:00:00 | by ReiLuna | [ Reply to This ]
      pretty good-though the last line kind of just ends the poem suddenly I feel-and that there should have been more written-but thats just my own opinion.
    | Posted on 2004-11-07 00:00:00 | by Raksha | [ Reply to This ]
      I enjoyed this a lot. Ah, butterfly inside the stomach is certainly one of the most beautiful sensations possible. And it's better said using the term butterfly rather than adrenaline personally. 'Cause the word only ruins our belief to feel with the heart and not how scientists call it hormones. This is a lovely write. The imagery is clear, the words flow smoothly, and the feeling is conveyed with no twists and turns.

    Thank you by the way for your comment on With Eyes. I'm glad you liked it. And thank you for adding it to your favorites, never thought that would happen for a million years.

    Take care.
    | Posted on 2004-11-07 00:00:00 | by wordsofmind | [ Reply to This ]


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