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Windows of Your Eyes


Author: Marbles
ASL Info:    24/M/IN
Elite Ratio:    2.34 - 46 /70 /19
Words: 65
Class/Type: Poetry /Passion
Total Views: 953
Average Vote:    4.0000
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Windows of Your Eyes



Through the windows of your eyes
I see your mind, heart, and soul.
Always shining brightly
And never growing dull.

They show a glimmer of hope
Of your past, present, and future.
Revealing yourself to me
How no words can show.

Passion, frustration, love, and hatred
All emotions you've ever known.
Through the windows of your eyes
I can see it all.




Submitted on 2004-11-07 23:03:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like this. Simple, straight to the point, nice descriptive phrases lead well into the last line"I can see it all in your eyes" This could be a very good song lyric, it tells your ideas without the needless complexity found in most poetry. With music as a foundation, it would really sing. Thanks for sharing.
nansofast
| Posted on 2004-11-08 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
  This is simple yet sweet. It's a simple write yet it speaks forcefully about something passed down throughout time. The eyes being the windows to your soul. Good job.
| Posted on 2004-11-07 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]
  As some people would say its fairly cliché` but nonetheless i like it... it is simple and i believe that eyes truly are windows to the soul..
| Posted on 2004-11-07 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
  Hi a very simple but strong piece. Using eyes as window to ones heart or soul is a very beautiful idea. So for me the best part is the title.
In whole the poem is good and has flow.
Well done with love shabnam
| Posted on 2005-02-02 00:00:00 | by shabnam | [ Reply to This ]


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