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    dots Submission Name: Sins--Reviseddots
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    Author: curiosityskitty
    ASL Info:    30/F/TN
    Elite Ratio:    3.2 - 145/149/30
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 409
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 931



    Description:
       Added a couple of new stanzas. I think it's complete now. THIS IS NOT A PERSONAL EIERENCE. PLEASE DO NOT TAKE IT AS SUCH.


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    dotsSins--Reviseddots
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    As do the towering trees that bend
    More with each passing storm
    So does she begin to weaken
    From the sins that he's performed

    The trees the only witness
    To the story never told
    The wind the only voice
    For the secret that she holds

    The woeful song that fills her ears
    Gives credence to the thought
    That pain gives way to freedom
    From the man that she has fought

    Sworn to protect and love her
    From his vow he did depart
    And with her hands above her
    Puts her anguish through his heart

    Now as she stands above him staring
    Her hands covered in his blood
    Scarlet raindrops wash away
    Torment in crimson floods

    No longer now a victim
    Of his sick demented games
    A hard-fought battle now she's won
    A victory she proclaims




    Submitted on 2004-11-08 01:05:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i can relate to this poem abuse sucks and is harder to get away from than people care to admit i like the way you put your thoughts together
    | Posted on 2004-11-08 00:00:00 | by DarkenedSoul | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a very powerful write full of drama and yet it is told so very well... your structure and control of events is very well done...
    i think it was sad that she was so trapped and weakened by him and the power he had over her and yet almost proud of her for getting the courage to do something (even though it was kill him...) but yeah... very powerful and well constructed and thought out... good job!
    | Posted on 2004-11-08 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]



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