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Sins--Revised


Author: curiosityskitty
ASL Info:    31/F/TN
Elite Ratio:    3.19 - 149 /149 /30
Words: 142
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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Added a couple of new stanzas. I think it's complete now. THIS IS NOT A PERSONAL EIERENCE. PLEASE DO NOT TAKE IT AS SUCH.


Sins--Revised



As do the towering trees that bend
More with each passing storm
So does she begin to weaken
From the sins that he's performed

The trees the only witness
To the story never told
The wind the only voice
For the secret that she holds

The woeful song that fills her ears
Gives credence to the thought
That pain gives way to freedom
From the man that she has fought

Sworn to protect and love her
From his vow he did depart
And with her hands above her
Puts her anguish through his heart

Now as she stands above him staring
Her hands covered in his blood
Scarlet raindrops wash away
Torment in crimson floods

No longer now a victim
Of his sick demented games
A hard-fought battle now she's won
A victory she proclaims




Submitted on 2004-11-08 01:05:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i can relate to this poem abuse sucks and is harder to get away from than people care to admit i like the way you put your thoughts together
| Posted on 2004-11-08 00:00:00 | by DarkenedSoul | [ Reply to This ]
  this is a very powerful write full of drama and yet it is told so very well... your structure and control of events is very well done...
i think it was sad that she was so trapped and weakened by him and the power he had over her and yet almost proud of her for getting the courage to do something (even though it was kill him...) but yeah... very powerful and well constructed and thought out... good job!
| Posted on 2004-11-08 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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