Description: this is obviously about self-mutalation. its true and it happens everyday. so the next time you think about doin one of theses things to someone b/c their different -maybe you'll remember my poem.
Because She Cuts -------------------------------------------
You judge her
because she cuts.
She cuts because
you judge her.
She disgusts you
because she cuts.
She cuts because
she disgusts you.
You shun her
because she cuts.
She cuts because
you shun her.
You call her names
because she cuts.
She cuts because
you call her names.
You hate her
because she cuts.
She cuts because
you hate her.
You ignored her
because she cut.
She killed herself because
you ignored her.
This is the gods honest truth because of the fact that everyone does ignore those who cut and it ends in death every time. they cut because of no self esteem and because no one cares. been there done that. i also see it everyday where i work. kids feel like everyone dont care and they would be better off not even being here. to some it is the last resort to all the pain they have endured in there life. the only way out. to ignore them is just plain suicide. erin
Card- Well...exuse me for saying, but cutting and carving are two different things. In my opinion, carving is just for attention seekers, cutting, in my experience, is done for the soul purpose of release. And how is someone lavished with attention more likely to display suicidal bahaviour? Thats absurd, to me. Maybe it goes back to the whole attention craving thing? Anyway, enough ranting...
I liked this poem, alot. The invers on the sentences, going from what ppl thought of her to why she cut, is very nice. Of course this piece is going to sound one sided, how could it not? Cutting is an everyday thing for some, this is what they feel? If it were told from both perspectives, the motive for suicide and the poem as a whole would be totaly irrelevent. Very nice piece, Kayler, dont listen to those other ppl...
You hate her because she cuts. She cuts because you hate her.
You ignored her because she cut. She killed herself because you ignored her.
ignore bite my lip always has something negative to say...this poem is about what you think and bite my lip put herself out there by saying that...just keep your onesided judgment to yourself...as for me, I like it and I'm glad that you were creative enough to let someone else witness how you feel about this
i thought this piece to be a bit one sided. i used to cut and cutting was never about suicide. i never wanted to kill myself. personal feelings aside, i thought the repition to be an effective tool, but i think it could have been used too much. also, i think if you had gone a bit more in depth the work could have been much more poweful.
some people like the abuse and merely cut for the rush. I myself have never cut before... But I have hurt myself (drugs) many times before. A bit one sided with this one. Maybe you should of went more into depth, and its just a suggestion, I'm not telling what you should do.
i found this very repaetative, it seeems to be just shifting the blame...in my exparance some one is more likely to kill them selves if people lavish them with attention...and cutting is not nessarly a suicdual thing...just a few days ago i craved tank into my forearm...last year i did Lexicon" on my chest... and ton of other things all over my body...as a whole i don't see anything wrong with this it's just a little to much fore me, i don't think it's okay to pass the blame off on some one else. thats my bit, you don't have to take any of this in to account if you don't want to
Submission Name: Because She Cuts
